Talk:Drama (graphic novel)

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Proposed revisions to article
--Hannahso608 (talk) 18:18, 20 November 2018 (UTC)

-I will remove the “Themes” section of the article, and create an “Analysis” section. The information that is currently under “Themes” will be moved to the “Analysis” section. This change to the structure of the article will improve its organization.

-I will work with Jdb337 to remove some unnecessary details in the “Summary” section, to make the article more concise and clear. The “Summary” section is currently the longest section of the article, and is excessively lengthy.

-I will add information about the credentials of the authors whose information is cited in the article to better ensure that the sources cited are reliable.

-I will create a “Genre/Style” section to the article in order to better achieve Wikipedia’s goal of balanced coverage. Drama’s graphic novel genre helps make it notable and distinct from other books.

-I will add more information about scholarly analysis on Drama, such as from Michelle Ann Abate’s “Springtime in the South…” article, and Meryl Jaffe’s “Using Graphic Novels in Education: Drama” article, which will fill in a content gap in the article. The Abate article, which presents a more critical view of the book, will also help meet Wikipedia’s guidelines for more balanced coverage.

-I will remove some peacock and weasel words that are used in the “Reception and Awards” section. This will remove biased language, and better achieve Wikipedia’s guidelines for more neutral coverage of the article topic.

-I will correct some instances of close and poor paraphrasing in the article, especially in the “Background” and “Themes” sections. This will improve the clarity and flow of the article, as well as mitigate any potential plagiarism issues.

-I will perform copyediting to several sentences in the article, such as by shortening some sentences, in order to improve the flow of the article, as well as make it more concise.

Bibliography:

Abate, Michelle Ann. "'Springtime in the South is Like a Song in My Heart': Raina Telgemeier's Drama, the Romanticization of the Plantation South, and the Romance Plot." Children's Literature in Education: An International Quarterly 48.4 (2017): 355-77. Web.

---. "Reading Capital: Graphic Novels, Typography, and Literacy." English Journal 108.1 (2018): 66-72. ProQuest Central, Research Library. Web.

Alverson, Brigid. "An Ever-Growing Demand for Middle Grade Graphic Novels." Publishers Weekly 265.28 (2018): 32. ProQuest Central, Research Library. Web.

Berland, Eti. "The Drama of Coming Out: Censorship and Drama by Raina Telgemeier." Graphic Novels for Children and Young Adults: A Collection of Critical Essays. Jackson, Mississippi: University Press of Mississippi, 2017. 205-217. Print.

"Graphic Novels Aren’t just Comic Books Anymore." Centre Daily Times (State College, PA), 2012, NewsBank. Web.

Jaffe, Meryl. "Using Graphic Novels in Education: Drama." Comic Book Legal Defense Fund. April 24, 2015. Web. .

Karen MacPherson, Scripps Howard,News Service. "Raina Telgemeier Goes for 'Drama' After Dental Pain of 'Smile'." Pittsburgh Post-Gazette (PA), 2012, NewsBank. Web.

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Proposed revisions to article
•I will be adding more content to the Awards and Reception section to make it more up to date. •I will paraphrase some parts of the Awards and Reception section because there are a lot of quotes. •I will also add information regarding the different awards and their prestige to make the article clearer overall. •I will add and edit the information already in the Controversy section since Wiki’s guidelines prefer the article to be up to date. •I will edit the phrasing of some of the sentences in the Controversy section because there are many parts that are quoted directly, but can easily be paraphrased which is what Wiki prefers. •In the Controversy section, I will include points from more reliable sources like the ones in my bibliography to make the article more reliable. •I will work with Hannahso608 on the summary to make it more concise. •We will edit the section by making it clearer to the reader since right now it is confusing and the talk page already has some comments about it being lengthy. o We will do this because Wiki’s guidelines explain how one section cannot take over the article and currently the summary is doing just that. •We will delete the last section within the summary section because it is illegible. •From there we are planning on developing a clearer table that describes the main characters in the graphic novel. •With all of these edits and when I add more information to the article, I will add citations that will improve the article reliability. References Adomat, D. S. (2013). Memo board. Journal of Children's Literature, 39(1), 62. Retrieved from http://gateway.proquest.com/openurl?ctx_ver=Z39.88-2003&xri:pqil:res_ver=0.2&res_id=xri:lion&rft_id=xri:lion:rec:abell:R05507850 The best, notable, and recommended books, 2013. (2013, Teacher Librarian, 40, 46-49. Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1346365831?accountid=11091 Cavna, M. (2015). 'Persepolis,' 'saga' and 'drama' among 'most challenged' books in U.S. libraries. Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1673055948?accountid=11091 Cavna, M. (2017, ). For them, every week is banned books week. The Washington Post Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1942457461?accountid=11091 Drama. (2012, 259, 55. Retrieved from http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A292503873/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=6dc27e86 Drama queen. (2012). Instructor, 122(2), 11. Retrieved from http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=ip,uid&db=eft&AN=82406019&site=ehost-live&scope=site Issues and trends. (2017). American Libraries, 48, 12-18. Retrieved from http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&AuthType=ip,uid&db=eft&AN=122521319&site=ehost-live&scope=site Rainbow list, 2013. (2013, 109, 26. Retrieved from http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A324981374/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=bc3f74c4 Rinka, M. (2018, ). Banned books: Censoring knowledge. University Wire Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/2131632828?accountid=11091 Stone, D. R. (2017a). Censorship dateline. Journal of Intellectual Freedom and Privacy, 2(3-4), 48-55. doi://dx.doi.org/10.5860/jifp.v2i3-4.6647 Stone, D. R. (2017b). Censorship dateline. Journal of Intellectual Freedom and Privacy, 2(3-4), 48-55. doi://dx.doi.org/10.5860/jifp.v2i3-4.6647 Telgemeier, raina: DRAMA. (2012, Retrieved from http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A298256045/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=8764517d Wildsmith, S. (2012, Drama.109, 59. Retrieved from http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A304307088/LitRC? u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=ac845d9d Writer, S. (2017, ). With new works,there's new need for 'banned books week'. Daily News of Newburyport, the (MA) Jdb337 (talk) 14:34, 20 November 2018 (UTC)Jdb337

Proposed revisions to article
- I propose to add images to the Wikipedia page because there are currently no pictures on the page. "Drama" is a commonly used term and adding a picture may clarify which page Wikipedia users are viewing.

- I propose to add a background section on the author (Raina Telgemeier) and her motivations for writing the graphic novel. This book has come under some controversy and adding a perspective from the author strengthens Wikipedia's criteria that the article have balanced coverage.

- I propose to add to the lead section to include more information about the graphic novel and the rest of the Wikipedia page. The lead paragraph right now is weak and a strong Wikipedia article needs a strong lead section that clearly lays out the article.

- I am going to add to the summary because it is very basic in its current state. The summary is perhaps the most important section of the Wikipedia page, but it is shorter in length than others sections such "controversy" or "reception and awards". Again, a strong Wikipedia needs balanced coverage.

- In the controversy, I propose to add more specific details about the actual controversy from reliable sources in order to provide more neutral coverage and information. C battin21 (talk) 02:58, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

I will be adding to the lead section and the summary. In the lead, I will include more about both the book and the article itself. I will give a more broad overview of the book, its author, its messages, and its reception. In the summary, I will add more content surrounding the plot and character development. Mil2trill (talk) 15:20, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

- I will be replacing a sentence for another, due to poor wording/phrasing of a sentence. Sentence deleted: "Justin is eager to try out for the musical but Jesse tells Callie that he is too shy." Replaced for "Despite the doubt voiced by her peers, Callie promises to herself and her peers to build one." — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarcComair (talk • contribs) 20:43, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

I will be replacing the end of a sentence, due to poor wording. words removed: "and Justin is upset." Replaced by:"Much to Justin’s dismay". — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarcComair (talk • contribs) 21:01, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Sources

New additions
I will be editing the "Background section" to include more content about the author of the book and what she was inspired by. Furthermore, the information will be provided by more authoritative sources, as opposed to the current sources used.

Edit the plot to make it flow better, also try and make it more concise.

More information about the graphic novels reception, as well as content on the purpose of novels/graphic novels that are centered around homosexuality and challenges that teenagers face. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarcComair (talk • contribs) 22:15, 12 April 2018 (UTC)

Bibliography: — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarcComair (talk • contribs) 18:09, 16 April 2018 (UTC)

Gordon, Ariel. "In Conversation with Raina Telgemeier." Winnipeg Free Press, Sep 17 2016, p. 9. ProQuest. Web. 16 Apr. 2018.

Wildsmith, Snow. "Drama." The Booklist 109.2 (2012): 59. ProQuest. Web. 16 Apr. 2018. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MarcComair (talk • contribs) 01:44, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Proposed Revisions to Drama SummaryHannahso608 (talk) 18:31, 6 December 2018 (UTC)
Drama follows Callie Marin, a seventh-grader at Eucalyptus Middle School. In school, Callie joins the stage crew for the production of Moon over Mississippi as the set designer and is excited to enact her plans for the set. She has visions to make a cannon that explodes, although there are doubts from her peers about its feasibility. While hanging posters for the musical, Callie meets twins, Justin and Jesse. Justin is eager to try out for the musical, but Jesse is too shy.

The next day, the three friends go to the mall, where Callie shows them a book about set design and describes her passion for theatre. As they wait for the twins' father to pick them up, Jesse and Justin sing one of the songs from the musical which allows Callie to recognize their talent. After Jesse rejects Callie’s suggestion for him to audition for the musical, he accepts her follow-up offer to work on stage crew with her. At school the day after, Callie’s friend Matt, a lighting crew member for the musical, angrily confronts her, and she is confused over his sudden aggression. She sits with Justin during lunch, where he shares that he is gay, and although Callie is shocked, she supports him nonetheless. ==Proposed Revisions to Drama Summary cont. User:Jdb337 Callie and Jesse then watch the auditions where the lead role was granted to West Redding causing Justin utter shock. During set production, Jesse reveals how he wants Justin to have his time to shine. While working on set production, Callie confesses her crush on Jesse to Liz, and she suggests asking him to the dance. The next day, Callies goes to the bookstore with the twins, and asks if their father knows that Justin is gay, to which Justin tells her no. Callie is then busy with preparing for the musical, going through rehearsals and successfully trying to figure out the cannon. When sales for the production are low, she demonstrates her cannon in front of the student body and generates excitement. The opening two nights of the musical are a success, but the third night is marred after West breaks up with Bonnie. Bonnie locks herself in a supply closet and refuses to come back out forcing the stage crew to chaotically find a backup which ends up being Jesse. He performs well and shares a kiss with West like the role calls for. Following his performance, Jesse asks Callie to the dance. However, at the dance, Jesse is found talking to West outside after ditching Callie. He implies to Callie that he, too, is gay, and Callie storms off after he makes a comment about her falling in love with every nice guy. To clear her mind, Callie and Greg, an upperclassmen she used to have a crush on, go for a walk where he tries to kiss Callie again, but she refuses. Later, Callie meets with Jesse where he apologizes and thanks her for helping him break out of his shell. Later, Matt, the lighting crew member, confesses his crush on Callie that made him act out of jealousy and lash out. At the end of the novel, the stage crew celebrates the success of the musical and Callie is named stage crew manager for the following year, much to her excitement.

I intend to make these edits to make the summary more concise and clear for the reader to understand. I added important details that were necessary that were originally not included. The summary originally extremely long and detail filled. I made all of the edits based on the Wikipedia suggestions to make the page easier to read. I also removed what seemed to be the character list since it was illegible. Jdb337 (talk) 21:05, 6 December 2018 (UTC)Jdb337