Talk:Dries Mertens/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 19:49, 6 March 2017 (UTC)

Just a few things to clean up in the article:


 * "On 1 July 2006, Mertens officially signed for AGOVV Apeldoorn, also dissolved as of 2013, on a season-long loan with the option of purchase." Just say that the club dissolved in 2013. Yes check.svg


 * "Such was his influence that Mertens was named new club captain for the 2008–09 Eerste Divisie season." Since it seems the first sentence of the next paragraph relates to this, I'd consider making this sentence the lead for the second paragraph, or even just merge the two into one larger paragraph. As it stands it makes things slightly unclear. Yes check.svg


 * "Mertens' two-season spell in Utrecht yielded 21 goals for the Belgian in 86 appearances across all competitions." Don't need the use of "the Belgian" here; it's clear who is being discussed. Yes check.svg


 * Five of the paragraphs open with a date (On 1 July, 2006, for example). Try to avoid that, as it gets repetitive. Yes check.svg Comment: Only one opens with a date now.


 * "Mertens added to his silverware" is a phrase used twice within three paragraphs. I'd suggest trying to switch the wording up a bit. Yes check.svg


 * "On 4 February 2017, Mertens and Hamšík both scored hat-tricks in a 7–1 win over Bologna, a result which saw Napoli score seven away goals in a match for the first time in the club's history." This one-sentence paragraph could probably just be added to the prior one, seeing how they both relate to the same season. Yes check.svg


 * "On 1 October 2010, Mertens received his first senior call-up..." The wording here suggests he played internationally as a junior, and the infobox also says he had 4 games for the Belgian U17 team. That seems like something worth adding to the article, even if its just a quick line. Yes check.svg


 * The two paragraphs in the AGOVV section don't have citations at the end, which is more important for the line about him being named captain. Yes check.svg Comment: Added citation to him being named captain. The concluding paragraph is a simple roundup of his time at the club. The figures are substantiated in the career statistics table below.


 * "It would be his final season in the Eredivisie, however, as at the conclusion of the campaign PSV accepted an offer from Serie A side Napoli for his signature." Has no citation to support this. Yes check.svg

Once these are taken care of, it should be good. Kaiser matias (talk) 19:49, 6 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Hi Kaiser matias, thank you for reviewing this page. I will climb into most of this tomorrow morning and tick them off above as I go along. Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 20:25, 6 March 2017 (UTC)
 * Alright,, I've finished sooner than I expected. Give the edits a look and see if you're happy with them. Let me know of any other changes which might need to be made. Thanks, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 20:50, 6 March 2017 (UTC)
 * I'm comfortable with the improvements. Kaiser matias (talk) 01:53, 7 March 2017 (UTC)