Talk:Dulquer Salmaan/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 09:30, 24 September 2016 (UTC)

Will review this article. Thank you. Been a while since I've done a review. I might get out of practice if I don't review an article once in a while. :-) —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 09:30, 24 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * The lead seems short. Maybe a few more sentences/an extra paragraph (like his foray into Tamil cinema and how popular he is).
 * : How is it now?
 * "Cited in the media as one of the most attractive Indian celebrities" — a few more (3 at least) references need to be cited there. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 14:41, 24 September 2016 (UTC)
 * : How about now?
 * Placed the references into one myself. Looks ok now. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 00:56, 25 September 2016 (UTC)

Early life

 * "After graduation, he worked in the U.S. and later moved to Dubai, to work in an I.T. related business" — What caused him to move to Dubai? What sort of I.T. related business was he in? Any references on it?
 * Changed to "After graduation, he worked in the U.S. and later did an I.T. related business in Dubai." No reference on the details of the business.
 * Should be fine. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 13:17, 24 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Link Mumbai.
 * Done.


 * "he chose acting because " ... somewhere down the lane my life became monotonous and routine", though he had never planned to be a film actor" — Kind of paradoxical. If he never planned to be a film actor, what was he interested in?
 * He was initially a businessman (still is); maybe that was what he was interested in. Anyway, removed "though he had never planned to be a film actor". Will that be okay?
 * Looks alright. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 13:17, 24 September 2016 (UTC)

Film career

 * Sub-headings would do for this portion like:

Debut, breakthrough and stardom (2012-2013)

Foray into Tamil cinema and recent work (2014-Present)


 * Done


 * "was also a major economic success" — "was also a major success at the box office."
 * Done


 * "He also won praise for his portrayal of Faizy." — A cluster of references pertaining to this information would be good.
 * Could get only two references. Is that okay?
 * Good enough. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 06:47, 25 September 2016 (UTC)

Personal life and off-screen work

 * "He has also been involved in several social service activities." — such as (just name of activities as an introduction would do)? references?
 * I've got only this: "He has acted in a short film as part of the Kerala motor vehicle department's safe riding campaign. He donated 150 items, including clothing, shoes, books, school supplies and crockery items, as a part of the Chennai Gives initiative." What should I do?
 * That's good enough. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 06:46, 25 September 2016 (UTC)


 * "In addition, he is the owner of several businesses," — The IBTimes source just says "also heads a dental business chain in Chennai, apart from being the director of Bangalore-based Motherhood Hospital." Again, references for the sentence would be good.
 * I got a reference that states that a web portal for car trading was his first business venture. Again, what should I do?
 * Hmmm, scrap off "he is the owner of several businesses" and simply say "In addition, he is the owner of a web portal for trading cars and a dental business chain in Chennai. He also acts as the director of the Bangalore-based Motherhood Hospital." Add the TOI reference too. —  Ssven2  Speak 2 me 06:46, 25 September 2016 (UTC)