Talk:Dutch expedition to Valdivia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)

I will take this one. Comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)

An interesting article. I've done a little bit of copyediting, please review my changes to check you are OK with them.
 * Your changes were all improvements.

Comments as follows:

Lead
 * Dupe link: Dutch Republic; Spanish Empire
 * Done.

Background
 * Dupe link: Huilliche
 * Done.

Expedition
 * link Hendrik Brouwer on first mention
 * Done.


 * Dupe linl: Valdivia
 * Done.


 * "Except for Brouwer and other leaders, the true objectives were not known to the participants of the expedition." This is a little unclear; are the objectives recited not the true objectives? What did the participants believe was the expedition's purpose?
 * Added a bit to try and clarify. Does that help? If not I will rewrite it to make clearer.

Chiloé
 * Dupe link: Chiloé Archipelago
 * Done.


 * "According to Diego de Rosales...": we need context for who he is; a historian presumably?
 * Yes. Apologies. Added.

Valdivia
 * Manquipillan is not redlinked but Manqueante is?
 * Done.

Spanish response
 * Dupe link: Arauco War (on Mapuche resistance)
 * Done.

Other stuff
 * References: note 10, Robert Kock ref needs formatting using the website template I think, to match note 11. Chile is spelt incorrectly
 * Done. I think. Wiki-referencing is not a strong point.


 * Bibliography: the Lane ref needs dashes in its ISBN.
 * Done. (Possibly.)


 * The Montt Pinto ref needs a place of publication and a OCLC number
 * Done


 * Captions for images shouldn't finish with fullstops
 * Umm. That's not my reading of MOS:CAPFRAGS. "Most captions are not complete sentences, but merely sentence fragments, which should not end with a period. If any complete sentence occurs in a caption, then all sentences, and any sentence fragments, in that caption should end with a period."


 * Images themselves have appropriate tags
 * No dablinks
 * External links check out OK

That's my review completed. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:59, 23 August 2018 (UTC)


 * That was embarrassing. Thank you for soldiering through it. Hopefully it is a little better now. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:03, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Have reviewed your changes and comment and this is looking good. I think this is well written and illustrated, covers the subject to an appropriate depth and referenced with reliable sources. Passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:31, 24 August 2018 (UTC)