Talk:Dutch invasion of Saint Helena/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 03:20, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

I'll take this one. Comments as follows:

Lead

 * No obvious issues identified but wonder if Anthony Beale worth a redlink
 * Agreed and linked - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Background

 * the settlement at Cape Town in Southern Africa.[2][1]: if it's your preference, I note the refs are not in chronological order here. Actually, just noticed, these refs are redundant anyway as they are used again for the following sentence. I would just cite the entire paragraph to [1] and [2] at the end.
 * I don't usually bother with the order of the refs but am happy to do so for GA level. I don't like whole paragraph citation where individual sentences come from different sources but agree that [1] and [2] should move here - Dumelow (talk) 07:45, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * established a settlement and fort.: perhaps namedrop Jamestown here (I assume that is the settlement referred to).
 * Agreed, think I must have had it that way as it wasn't Jamestown until after the Restoration. I've referred to it now as "later known as" - Dumelow (talk) 07:45, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Dutch invasion

 * Is there an appropriate link for the Dutch navy?
 * Linked to Royal Netherlands Navy - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Would Jacob de Gens be worth a redlink? Ditto Anthony Beale.
 * Agreed and linked - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * I suspect it is not available, hence its absence, but anything on the size of the attacking forces/garrison at Jamestown?
 * Alas no - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * which they renamed Good Fortune.: is the original name of the fort known?
 * It was originally the Castle of St John, then James Fort. I've gone back and added some more detail to the Background section - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * It looks like, apart from the first sentence, the entire paragraph could just be cited at the end with [3] and [4].
 * Again, I prefer to not merge where individual sentences come from different sources, I did get rid of two [3][4]s in consecutive sentences - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Recapture by English forces

 * Link sloop, Royal Navy
 * Done - Dumelow (talk) 08:09, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * Add 4 May somewhere into the narrative; I assume that was the date the expedition arrived at Fisher's Valley.
 * Yes, good point! Added - Dumelow (talk) 08:09, 7 February 2022 (UTC)


 * The second paragraph could be entirely cited to [3] and [5] at its end.
 * Again, prefer not to do this as I am only using one of the refs for one sentence - Dumelow (talk) 08:09, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Aftermath

 * and, later in 1673,: is this year correct? If so, suggest rewording to the effect of "later that year" or similar.
 * Yes, it came through a Royal Charter of the same year. Changed to "later that year" - Dumelow (talk) 08:11, 7 February 2022 (UTC)

Other stuff

 * No dupe links
 * Image tags checked and OK

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 03:20, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi Zawed, thanks so much for looking at this (and so quickly!). I think I've addressed all your comments above, the only thing I didn't action was the refs, which I prefer to keep separate - Dumelow (talk) 08:12, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Looks all fine to me, passing as GA as I believe that this article meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 02:33, 8 February 2022 (UTC)