Talk:Dylan Kwasniewski/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:47, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

Looks like an Interesting fellow we have here. Will be posting comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 15:47, 18 January 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Racing career

 * "and would make the move to NASCAR the following year." - reword to and made the move to NASCAR the following year.

Touring series

 * "In 2011, Kwasniewski entered the K&N Pro Series West series driving for Gene Price Motorsports" - comma is needed between "series" & "driving"
 * "along with nine top tens" - top-tens
 * "Kwasniewski subsequently was named Sunoco Rookie of the Year." - The sponsor is redundant.
 * "along with recording 15 top tens." - same problem with the second point in this sub-section
 * "Kwasniewski led teammate and 2011 series champ" - informal, should be changed to champion
 * "beat Pursley for the title by six points, and at 17 years, 5 months and 10 days," - split off the sentence so it reads as follows beat Pursley for the title by six points. At 17 years, 5 months and 10 days,

Xfinity Series

 * "On February 3, 2014, Turner Scott Motorsports announced that Kwasniewski will enter the Nationwide Series for the 2014 season driving the team's No. 31 Rockstar Chevrolet." - I'd change "will to would given 2014 has passed. You shoould add a comma between "season" and "driving" and put the acronyms of Turner Scott Motorsports in parentheses
 * "Kwasniewski was the fastest during the second day of Nationwide testing at Daytona International Speedway," - Perhaps you could change the text in bold letters to either was the fastest driver or was fastest
 * "and later entered the ARCA Racing Series' Lucas Oil 200 with TSM, and won the pole position." - winning the pole position.
 * "Kwasniewski ended 2014 with three top-10s" - top-tens
 * ", and with Brennan Poole joining the team, his future with the team became uncertain" - reptition of team