Talk:Dystopia (Iced Earth album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:52, 4 December 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Too much quotefarming
 * "Songs" section too messy; try to merge it somehow, like in "Reviews" section
 * The article is generally messy arranged; "Writing and recording" doesn't belong to "Background", same for "World Dystopia Tour" and "Reviews" (should be lone two-header sections), "Track listing" should be put somewhere above "Personnel"
 * "Sales and chart positions" is too small; integrate it somewhere, how about into the small section "Release"?
 * odd usage of hyphens, eg "Iced Earth -vocalist" (hyphen should be removed) or "Wacken -festival" (same); Hyphens should be used when you want to separate eg prefixes and sufixes (for example anti-communism) or if you want to join something, eg Compound modifiers (for example well-prepared student). However, the hyphen is often omitted
 * Apart the wrong hyphen usage, the article contains several prose issues, mostly in grammar. Examples:
 * "Two of the albums songs ("Dystopia" and "Tragedy and Triumph") also feature the return of the "Something Wicked" -storyline and the bands mascot Set Abominae previously featured on previous albums" - redundant repetition
 * "it's the band's first album with vocalist Stu Block, who joined after former vocalist Matt Barlow left the band for a second time on August 6, 2011" - same
 * "During its first week the album sold over 6,000 copies in the United States and charted in many countries" - how many is many?
 * "According to Jon Schaffer and Stu Block, writing the lyrics was basically the two of them drinking beer and watching movies." - avoid noun + ing, and the last clause should be rewritten.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * How reliable are the following sites:
 * imperumi.net
 * hallowed.se
 * cmdistro.com
 * metal-army.com
 * about.com
 * bravewords.com
 * themetalcritic.com
 * kaaoszine.fi
 * discogs.com is not reliable because it is user-generated
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * rationale for File:IcedEarth2011.jpg indicates as a source, although I could not find this picture anywhere on its homepage.
 * no need to italicize the album in references.
 * 1) Overall: there are too many issues, not only in references, but in prose. This should be copyedited and peer reviewed before nominating in future.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * no need to italicize the album in references.
 * 1) Overall: there are too many issues, not only in references, but in prose. This should be copyedited and peer reviewed before nominating in future.
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Dabsolver check: Fixed three dab links
 * Checklinks check: one dead
 * Reflinks check: ok
 * Fixed dashes