Talk:Eagle Woman/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 20:29, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Hello, This looks like a very interesting article. Thanks for nominating it. I will start the review shortly. I do that by reading through of the article first, and identifying any comments or questions by section of the article, and after that I use the GA table template to evaluate the GA criteria.

Would you mind if I went ahead and made any minor edits (punctuation, cite order, etc.) or link changes — that you could review to ensure agreement? Or, would you prefer me to list all of those? I am happy to go with whatever works the best for you.–CaroleHenson (talk) 20:33, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It looks like you have been off-line for a couple of days. I will make minor edits, like links and give you a diff to see what I did.–CaroleHenson (talk) 02:02, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Intro / lede

 * I added some links, see this diff.
 * It would be nice to round out the intro a bit more, perhaps with information about trading and trade disputes, delegation to D.C., and the Gold Rush period.–CaroleHenson (talk) 02:02, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅?  G M G  talk  13:42, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Great job!–CaroleHenson (talk) 18:57, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * This section is ✅.–CaroleHenson (talk) 18:57, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Early life

 * Second paragraph. Regarding "In 1838, after her parents' deaths, she married Canadian fur trader Honoré Picotte,[c] a prestigious general agent in the top position[3]..." - I don't know what in the top position means? Did he run the American Fur Company? Or, was he the manager / lead trader at Fort Pierre?
 * ✅?  G M G  talk  13:43, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, that is much clearer. Thanks!–CaroleHenson (talk) 18:57, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * I made a minor change re: the use of "previous" and "wife" in this edit. See what you think.–CaroleHenson (talk) 02:23, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * This section is ✅.–CaroleHenson (talk) 18:57, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Diplomacy

 * I added a few links here and one comma after "To this end".
 * Would this image be helpful re: the reservation?–CaroleHenson (talk) 02:44, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, it may be. But I'm not sure there's a way to do it without running into stacking issues or sandwiching issues on wider monitors.  G M G  talk  12:41, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
 * That's fine. It was just a thought.–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:35, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Life on the reservation. Regarding "This left Eagle Woman, along with her children, to take over the trade post alone as the territory's first Sioux businesswoman." alone seems a little confusing, since she has her family with her.
 * ✅  G M G  talk  12:41, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Black Hills Gold Rush. Regarding "The Black Hills Gold Rush began in 1874 as word spread of the discovery of gold in lands owned by the Sioux, according to the terms of the Treaty of Fort Laramie six years prior, including the Black Hills." what do you think about moving "including the Black Hills" to follow "lands owned by the Sioux?
 * ✅  G M G  talk  12:41, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * This sentences seems out of place / order "Eagle Woman led the Grand River delegation to the meeting."
 * ✅ Seems to be an artifact of content that was rearranged incompletely.  G M G  talk  12:41, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Regarding "Though Eagle Woman opposed the founding of the reservation and did not sign the 1876 treaty, she signed an 1882 treaty which reserved land for school purposes, modified reservation boundaries, and changed the government workers and rations they received." does it read better to swap "school purposes" for "schools"?–
 * ✅  G M G  talk  12:41, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

CaroleHenson (talk) 03:16, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Looks great! This section is ✅–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:35, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

Later life and death

 * Regarding "Alma continued her generosity to white and Native people in the area alike," shouldn't "alike" follow "people"?–CaroleHenson (talk) 03:26, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅  G M G  talk  12:48, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The note from Eagle Woman in the text box is signed "Your affectionate mother"... but she is her grandmother. Is that a typo? Or, perhaps she raised him?–CaroleHenson (talk) 03:32, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yes, Charles Picotte was her stepson, not her grandson.  G M G  talk  12:48, 11 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I added his name after "She wrote to her stepson," just to make the connection a little clearer. Sorry, I am not sure how I came to the conclusion he was a grandson.–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:42, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * This section is ✅–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:42, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

Legacy
No comments.–CaroleHenson (talk) 03:26, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments
Thanks for the review. Gimme a little bit to respond. Obviously things are a bit less than normal at the moment. Courtesy pings for in case they're interested in weighing in. G M G talk  13:52, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Absolutely. Take care.–CaroleHenson (talk) 17:07, 2 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Repinging Carole to see if there is any additional feedback that needs to be addressed.  G M G  talk  12:49, 11 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The article looks great! I am passing it. Thanks for your work on it, .–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:45, 11 April 2020 (UTC)