Talk:Early life of Ricky Ponting/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  02:50, 13 December 2009 (UTC) I'll get to this in approx. 48 hours. My apologies for the delay so far. Wizardman 02:50, 13 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Ok :)  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 19:56, 14 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Here's the review now:


 * The article could use a punctuation copyedit. I found several issues in the lead alone.
 * Can you be more specific :)  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Basically, I saw instances where there were commas where none are needed, and a spot where there was a period when it should've been a comma or semicolon. For example, "The eldest of three children, Ponting emulated the feats of his father, playing cricket in summer and Australian rules football in winter, before breaking his arm while playing for a junior North Launceston Football Club team as a 15-year-old." The comma after winter is not needed, since it's continuing the same thought. Wizardman  16:40, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * You mention (Sheffield) Shield in the lead but there's no link or full name there, which there should be.
 * Done.  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * "He received a bat sponsorship with Kookaburra Sport when in year eight," the 'when in year eight' part sounds odd, though i think i know what you mean; just reword it a bit.
 * Done.  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * "Graeme was "a good club cricketer" and played Australian rules, while Lorraine was a state vigoro champion." If it's a quote from somewhere it needs a cite.
 * Done. (End of next sentence anyway)  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * "On the Monday he struggled to trouble the scorers, but bounced back with a century on Tuesday. Wednesday saw him make 117 not out and he continued his form into Thursday and Friday, scoring centuries on each day." A date would be needed to start, I have no idea which Monday etc. it is.
 * All I know is it was in January 1986.  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * In 1986, Ponting said "I'd love to play for Australia ... I look up to David Boon because he's from here". Quotes need cites.
 * Done. (End of next sentence anyway)  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * "Playing five games for Tasmania for the 1992 Under–19 carnival in Perth, Ponting scored 350 runs, " Is carnival jargon for something, or that just a misprint?
 * Done.  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * The long Mark Taylor quote needs a cite.
 * Done. (End of next sentence anyway)  Aaroncrick  ( talk )  Review me! 07:52, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

It's a nice article but it definitely needs some work yet. I'll put it on hold. After this is all finished I'd like to have someone outside copyedit it if possible, it's likely I missed other things. Upon completion of all that, I'll pass it. Wizardman 04:54, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Have asked for a copy-edit; however, I have done one myself.  Aaroncrick   ( talk )  Review me! 09:01, 15 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Looks much better after the copyedit. I'll now pass the article as a GA. Wizardman  16:33, 16 December 2009 (UTC)