Talk:Earth system interactions across mountain belts

Hi Hayley,

As a non-specialist reader I think the article is well-written and clearly organized. Very nice, helpful visuals. Lots of references in the reference list. Here are a few suggestions:

1. In Section 1 is along-strike a noun or an adjective? It seems to vary in different sentences. 2. Some sections (not introduction sections which are OK) only have one sentence. I'm not sure how acceptable this is for Wikipedia but it seems a bit strange to me. If a subsection only has one sentence is it worth having as a sub-section? 3. Should the visuals in the text be referenced in ascending order? For example, Figure 7 appears before Figure 4. Or is this just how the figures fit on a Wikipedia page?

Thanks,

Textbookzoom3 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Textbookzoom3 (talk • contribs) 12:50, 20 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi Hayley,

Your content is great and informative. There are some minor suggestions for you.

First, a lot of wordsssss on your page especially in your introduction. You can try to separate in different sub-heading and paragraphs.

Second, you can explain more about the consequences of each influence such as monsoon intensification and the change of the biosphere process.

Third, you can edit the content and the subtopic (the content page only show 1.1, 1.1.1 .... then nothing). Also, try to put the related figures next to your content. Readers can easier to follow.

Great Work!!!

Marco:) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marcolam308 (talk • contribs) 13:05, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi Hayley,

Your page is really well-organized and informative. Your figures are well-explained with the descriptions.

1. The first sight on your page was that the titles are quite long that might be hard to understand. Maybe try to shorten them ?!

2. I just wonder how your figure number assigned, it would be easier to read if they follow the sequence you mentioned in the paragraphs and put the figures next to the paragraphs.

3. You defined earth system interactions as the interactions between the four spheres, But it seems your page discusses heavily on some but not the others. Maybe you can title the sections as “Sphere vs Sphere”

4. You might explain “Mountain Belts” in the first sentences.

Excellent Work!

Oscar - 20201012

Hi Hayley,

The page is well organized, and it covers a wide range of interactions and processes within the earth system. Nice work!

Below are some suggestions:

Figure 7 clearly depicts the triple junction in South America, but I think you could add a legend or state in the caption that red and blue lines represent divergent and convergent boundary respectively.

For the dynamic topography part, I think you may include some more explanation on how exactly may flat slab subduction and subduction of triple junction lead to uplift.

Your work is really neat and concise!

I would recommend some minor adjustments – you may mention the examples in the text instead of only stating them in citations in some of the paragraphs. This may make the page even more concrete.

Good work, keep it up!

Nathalie

Nykwong (talk) 14:56, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

Hi Hayley,

First of all, you have written your article with a good length with a lot references! I would like to give you some comments base don my observatiosns

Communication/content - Some sentences are a bit lengthy, I feel a little difficult to follow the ideas. Try to keep it more simple! :) (especially in the second paragraph of Mantle processes driving changeas in topography/ monsoon intensification section - Maybe you can give one or two concluding sentences about how can you find out climatic changes based on erosion rate/ deposited sediments? - I want to know how does higher erosion rate affect the biodiversity? Maybe you can explain further on it.

visuals - Maybe you can provide an image about Peruvian broken foreland/ how is it different from the other part of the Peru-chillie segments?(? such that I can know how it is related to the flat-slab system :) - The image showing slab break-off is clear! Good job

Overall it is informative! Keep going mate.

Kenneth

- Hello Hayley,

I love your page, it is exciting to read and the images are well illustrated. Well done!

My suggestions

1. In paragraph 3, line 3 - I think you should be more definite/specific on what type of interdisciplinary research. 2. Fig. 1, 3 and 5 would communicate more if it could be animated to show how slab could detachment and how the Indian plate (Fig. 5) migrate through time. I think this is what is currently not shown anyway. This page can achieve that. 3. Be sure you have the copyright to use Fig. 4.

Overall, nice reading your page. Cheers, Blessing.

Hi Hayley,

Your page finally have included the interactions between different spheres, you have got great improvements! I have some comments for you below:

1. I like your introduction, quite precise to tell whats the page about

2. I think you can put the climate drives tectonics section into the interactions part.

3. Maybe you can add some more details that how each process changes the surface," Volcanism occurs at the surface." , how does it cause impacts to the surfaces?

4. how shallow-water sedimentation along Andes allows reconstruction of shoreline?

Overall, I saw your great effort in modifying the page!

Kenneth 16Nov,20

Hi Hayley,

I like the way you introduce each system at first! And the introduction is now very straightforward😊

Below are some suggestions for you:

I think for terms like “broken foreland” and “dynamic tilting”, you may add a link or a brief explanation in the text.

In the section “Earth Systems”, perhaps you can swap the position of the evolutionary tree diagram and the figure showing flat-slab. So that they are closer to the related text.

Interactions among the lithosphere, mantle and atmosphere are discussed extensively, it would be great if you could write more about how the biosphere interact with the other systems (or just add some examples in the paragraph).

Good work!

Nathalie

Nykwong (talk) 03:29, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Hi Hayley,

Here are some comments for you.

1. It is much more clear when you explain different spheres on Earth. However, there is no biosphere-related example for the mountain belts you mentioned. You may try to fill the gap of that. Perhaps alpines?

2. You may keep the consistence for the titles in section 2. Like 'what and what' instead of influence on somethings. That can wrap up the main ideas of which are interacting.

3. You can also state the uniqueness of mountain belts. Like how is it different from other geological or environmental systems on Earth.

Nice Work! Oscar

Hi Hayley,

Here are some minor comments for you.

1.You can put the pic next to the content and below the introduction. 2. You can explain more on the Earth Science part. 3. You can explain the history of some mountain belts.

Good Work! Marco