Talk:EastEnders: E20/GA1

GA Review
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This article is largely in great shape, and most of my concerns below I'm sure can be addressed quickly. Please address each item line-by-line and I'll strike them as we go. If I could offer a word of constructive criticism, I think in the future you should try to use less quotes (especially long quotes) and consider where you can paraphrase instead. Ok, here we go... —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  21:51, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Lead
 * Could you perhaps put in the first sentence when it ran? For example, "...soap opera, which premiered in January 2010" or "which originally ran from January 8 to January 25, 2010" or something like that?
 * Done, and changed the second paragraph to avoid repetition.
 * My impression is this series ran and is over, right? If so, you should be using past tense here, not present tense. (In other words, "was" instead of "is", and "followed" instead of "follows".)
 * The series is over but all the episode are still available on the internet.
 * Where did this, this video, this and this originally air? I ask because they seem like a legitimate BBC documentary, but typically YouTube videos aren't acceptable as reliable sources. If this documentary originally aired on YouTube, they could be considered acceptable. However, if they originally aired on BBC television or on their official website, the source should be to that, not the YouTube video...
 * I'm not sure of the exact dates they originally aired but they all came out about a week apart in January. The first two were originally on the BBC website here but each was replaced with the next and I discovered the BBC had put them on Youtube as well. The third and fourth were on Youtube before the website, but only the fourth video is available on the website now. Any suggestions? AnemoneProjectors (talk) 22:18, 19 February 2010 (UTC)
 * So wait, they originally aired on television? Or on the website? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  22:51, 19 February 2010 (UTC)
 * The first two originally aired on the BBC's media literacy website, and last two originally aired on Youtube, but only the last video is available on the BBC site now. It is the official BBC's Youtube channel, though. AnemoneProjectors (talk) 23:01, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Conception
 * The third paragraph is basically a collection of long quotes. I think you should look it over again and see if you could paraphrase some of it. As a general rule of thumb, quotes should only be used when you couldn't possibly say it better yourself in the prose...
 * I have a bad habit of over-relying on quotes and I know it's an issue, and I find it quite tricky with longer quotes. Did my best! AnemoneProjectors (talk) 22:46, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Production
 * You might also consider cutting down on some of the quotes in the second paragraph here...
 * Done.
 * "Sathe commented: "We created some brilliant scenes from the eavesdropping stuff."" I'm not sure what this means? The sources says "They developed scripts by listening to conversations on buses and in the shopping centre", and that starts to get touched on after this quote, but as its written now, that quote is unexplained and confusing.
 * I only added that quote today. It was in the wrong place. I've moved it to after the "listening to conversations" sentence.
 * "...Scott Matthewman of The Stage said "make[s] it feel more like an episode of Hollyoaks." Could you add some context as to what Hollyoaks is? As an American reader, I've never heard of it. Also, I don't think this has to be in quotes, you could easily paraphrase it...
 * I added "a Channel 4 soap opera targetted at a teen audience." - does that help? AnemoneProjectors (talk) 22:46, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Casting
 * "Kenny said "I'm really thrilled to have been given the opportunity..." Unless I'm missing something, I don't see the quote in this source?
 * I have a primary source for the full quote, is that ok? I think I was trying to replace some of the primary sources but didn't realise the full quote wasn't in the reference I replaced it with.
 * "She confirmed: "My voice is completely different..." Can you trim some of this quote? I think it's unnecessarily long...
 * Paraphrased.
 * "Ricky Norwood said, "I am so excited to be on the show, it's an honour to now be a part of a show that has been on in my house for as long as I have been alive. I am born and bred in the East End – a stone's throw from the real Albert Square – it feels like a homecoming. I love being part of a cast that feels like family and can't wait to have a scene in the [Queen] Vic." This quote, too, I think could use some trimming. In fact, I don't even see the first part "I am so excvited to be on the show" at the source...
 * Oops, that was the replaced primary source again. I've shortened the quote. AnemoneProjectors (talk) 22:59, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Characters
 * In the first sentence of the description of each of the four main characters, you quote prose from the articles. (For example, in Zsa Zsa Carter, you have, "She is described as "Beautiful, funky and an outspoken tomboy...") You should only use quotes when quoting a specific person, not to quote the prose of an article or source. You should rework these into article prose and drop the quotes. In all of these cases, it should be easy to do.
 * Paraphrased them all.
 * "Norwood explained: "He doesn't like his real name so he tried to create something that would get away from..." I don't see this quote in the source? This, too, you might consider paraphrasing anyway...
 * Paraphrased, and found the correct reference. I also added something about the character's parents. AnemoneProjectors (talk) 23:50, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

I'll place this on hold for now. Thanks! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  21:51, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

GA Checklist

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Nice work! That's a pass! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  13:26, 20 February 2010 (UTC)
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Nice work! That's a pass! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  13:26, 20 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Nice work! That's a pass! —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  13:26, 20 February 2010 (UTC)