Talk:East Bengal Club/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 12:43, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Discussion
Hello ArnabSaha, I'll be reviewing this article and will posting further comments within the next few days. Tayi Arajakate Talk 12:43, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks  Saha ❯❯❯   Stay safe    13:02, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Putting the article on hold for a week, due to recent events surrounding the subject and on nominator's request. I might add some comments or suggestions during this period. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 14:21, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Pulling it off hold per nom's request, the review will be completed within the next 24 hours. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 11:33, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , I've read through the article once and if asked then I would have said that some of the prose could be improved. But on going down from the section on history, citation by citation, I can't help but notice that there is some issue in almost every line. I can't see the point of continuing instead of just fixing them. I'll list the issues in the comments, that I've spotted till now, just in the subsections on Formation and 1920 – 1930s so you can understand what I'm getting at.
 * I am almost inclined to fail this nomination but I think this can be fixed with a bit of close attention. If you want I can fail this and help in article improvement which you could nominate again later for someone else to review. Alternatively, I could put it on hold till 30 October and then carry out a complete review, however I'll not put it on hold anymore after that and will just pass or fail it. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:09, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , I thought MoS issues were solved at GOCE. I would say, fail it. After that, I will solve the issues and reapply at GOCE  Saha ❯❯❯  Stay safe    12:30, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , okay I'll fail it and will see if I can help out a bit afterwards. Other than the wikilinking, these are all mostly prose issues and not very obvious without looking at the sources. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:40, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the review  Saha ❯❯❯  Stay safe  </b> </b> 14:30, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the review <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 14:30, 21 October 2020 (UTC)

Assessment
<ol> <li>Comprehension:</li>

<li>Verifiability:</li>

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<li>Neutrality:</li>

<li>Stability: The article is stable for the most part.</li> <li>Illustration: The article is well illustrated with images and other graphics.</li>

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Comments

 * , the Earthwig's Copyvio Dectector report pull up a number of violations. Most of these appear to be false positives but some of them needs attending to. You can click on the compare links to see what exactly the violations are for each weblink.
 * The first three can be ignored as they have plagiarised from wikipedia instead of the other way around, although I am surprised to see that ESPN has plagarised from wikipedia but in this case the article was posted at a date after the addition was made on wiki.
 * The fourth one is a bit complicated though as the violation that it pulls up is the sequence of years in which the club won various championships and other honors which from my educated guess can not be copyrighted. Just to be safe though, perhaps you can stylise the section on "Honours" into a chart format.
 * The fifth one is definitely plagarism on wikipedia, most of these are names but some of these are parts of lines which are near copies, it would need some rephrasing and possibly reordering of names to be fixed. The copyvio article is the timeline of EB on Sportstar.
 * The sixth one is a forum link which copies from wikipedia with attribution, so can be ignored.
 * Other that there doesn't appear to anything major but I would recommend going through the ones with 10–20% confidence at least once and attempt to mitigate them wherever possible, most of these seem to require minor re-ordering of names or rephrasing of phrases if they are genuine violations.

Tayi Arajakate Talk 12:41, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , many big club articles (mostly FAs) use the existing 'honour' format, so I will keep the existing one. And solved the others. Most of them are names/years. <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 15:12, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , looks better now although the following two sentences could be rephrased a bit.
 * In cricket, the club won both the Cricket Association of Bengal senior league and senior-division knockout tournament jointly with Mohun Bagan.
 * That period saw the rise of the Pancha Pandavas. The five players, P. B. A. Saleh, Ahmed Khan, K. P. Dhanaraj, Appa Rao and P. Venkatesh played together at East Bengal from 1949 to 1953. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 15:38, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 09:45, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * That period saw the rise of the Pancha Pandavas. The five players, P. B. A. Saleh, Ahmed Khan, K. P. Dhanaraj, Appa Rao and P. Venkatesh played together at East Bengal from 1949 to 1953. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 15:38, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 09:45, 21 October 2020 (UTC)


 * The logo of the club also needs to be resized to comply with non-free use rationale guideline. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 15:41, 20 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , didn't datbot reduce the size? the bot does, so I hardly care. OK, I will resize it (it might take some more time). <b style="border:1px solid black"> <b style="color:#FF0000">Saha</b> ❯❯❯ <b style="color:#0043AF"> Stay safe  </b> </b> 08:40, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Issues with prose and manual of style. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:16, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Jorabagan is wikilinked twice and to the article of a neighborhood. The first link refers to a football club for which no article exists so should be delinked. It should also be specified as "Jorabagan Club" instead of just Jorabagan.
 * The following line, "They formed East Bengal, as a Sports and Cultural Association in Jorabagan, home of Suresh Chandra, on 1 August 1920" should be modified to specify "in the neighbourhood of Jorabagan". The portion highlighted in red is also not covered by any of the three citations and should be removed, it does not appear to add anything even if it could be otherwise supported by other reference, alternatively you could add another citation which does verify it if you wish.
 * Minor, but the bracketed portion, "Goshto (on loan from Mohun Bagan)" should not be in italics.
 * The first mention of IFA should be in its unabbreviated form, Indian Football League.
 * The following lines, "Because Cameroons 'A' team was already in the First Division the 'B' team could not gain promotion, East Bengal was next in line for promotion. However, more controversy arose since the IFA allowed only two Indian-based clubs in the IFA First Division. (At that time the IFA was a British organization.) This rule had previously deprived clubs like "Kumartuli" and "Town" from entering the First Division. During a governing body meeting of the IFA, the nine British clubs approved East Bengal's promotion. Ironically, two Indian clubs, Mohun Bagan and Aryan, opposed it. East Bengal's efforts led to the abolition of the oppressive Indian club limit rule." could be better phrased better.
 * I propose something like the following, "Because Cameroons 'A' team was already in the First Division, the 'B' team was not eligible for promotion. The governing body of the IFA under British rule also had a rule limiting the number of Indian-based clubs in the First Division to two only clubs. The Indian club limit had previously deprived clubs like "Kumartuli" and "Town" from entering the First Division. Petitions were forwarded to the governing body and East Bengal's efforts during this period led to the abolition of the repressive limit on Indian clubs. During the following governing body meeting, the rule was revised where ironically nine British clubs approved East Bengal's promotion while the two Indian clubs, Mohan Bagan and Aryan opposed it. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:23, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The following line, "In 1925, East Bengal made IFA First Division debut and Mona Dutta became the maiden goalscorer in the league." needs to mention that he became the maiden goalscorer for the club and not of the league, which is a bit unclear here.


 * Issues with verifiability. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:16, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Among the three citations for the first few lines of the section on formation, the second citation (attributed to TheHardTackle) is unnecessary. Much of the material is otherwise covered by the other two citations. Jorabagan being the home of Suresh Chandra is however not verifiable from any of them, since it is a minor detail, it could probably be removed.
 * The following lines, "In the month they formed, the club participated in their maiden tournament in the Hercules Cup, which was a 6-a-side tournament. On 11 August 1920, the club played their first match against Metropolitan College winning 4–0. East Bengal won the tournament." under the subsection of 1920 – 1930s is not supported by an inline citation. Please support it with one or adjust appropriately if there is any inaccuracy.
 * The Frontline article seems to partially verify the first line. Although it calls the Hercules Cup, a seven-a-side tournament and states the club won it but doesn't mention any dates or a game with Mohan Bagan. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:19, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The following lines, "Following this, the club became affiliated with the IFA and entered league play in the IFA Second Division. The club finished in third place in their first season. East Bengal first played against Mohun Bagan on 8 August 1921 in the Cooch Behar Cup semi-final match, which ended in a goalless draw. It was an unofficial derby at that time." under the subsection of 1920 – 1930s is not entirely supported by the inline citations. The second citation doesn't verify any of these. The first citation doesn't verify the last line. Both of them are also primary sources, one should have secondary sources for these lines.
 * The following line, "In 1924, the club won the Second Division to gain promotion to the IFA First Division after finishing in second place to Cameroons 'B'." contradicts the cited source, both the clubs were joint winners of the Second Division according to it.
 * In the following line, "On 28 May 1925, the first official Kolkata Derby was played where Nepal Chakraborty scored the only goal for East Bengal." the date is not verifiable by the source. So would need a citation for that as well.


 * Issues with comprehensiveness. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 12:17, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The Frontline article mentions the first ground of the club which was acquired by the club in 1922 and shared with its rival, Mohan Bagan. This seems to be omitted from the article.