Talk:East Bengal Ultras/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 14:36, 12 August 2020 (UTC)

Picking this one up, review coming soon. Kosack (talk) 14:36, 12 August 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The North Stand is mentioned here but not in the text, so it needs a source.

Lead

 * "also known as the Bangal Brigade (due to the ethnicity of majority of the fanbase)", this appears to be a direct copy and paste from ref 3. Information needs to be presented in your own words.
 * "the vocal supporters' movement for Indian club", a few issues with this sentence. I'm not sure what vocal is adding here and I'm not really sure a fan group can be described as a "movement" either. Also, add football with a link after Indian.
 * Link I-League.
 * They are the first > They were...
 * Might be worth using the full pyrotechnic show and providing a link for the uninitiated.
 * "Currently, they have around 25 chants and slogans", source? Also, words like currently should generally be avoided as they are prone to becoming outdated.
 * "In 2019-20 I-League season" > In the...
 * Also, year span ranges in seasons should use an endash.
 * "and broke the previous record of" > breaking the previous record of...
 * "which had also been set by the East Bengal Ultras" > which the group had also set.

Supported club

 * Link East Bengal to the club.
 * "lighting up the torches" > lighting torches...
 * This section seems to be another copy and paste, this time of ref 5.

Initial years: 2013–2016

 * The caption could do with more information, a year perhaps?
 * No need to link Bengaluru FC twice.
 * One or two phrases that are a bit journalistic, things like "created history" and "commanding display" are not very encyclopedic.

Pyro show

 * "Fans sang in their loudest voices", again comes across very promotional and journalistic.

Tifos

 * "The 2018–19 saw East Bengal FC", something missing here.
 * Kolkata Derby is already linked previously.
 * "The East Bengal Ultras won the fan battles", I can't see anything to imply that in the source?
 * "This tifo became an instant hit among the fans", again the source doesn't seem to support this.
 * "covered by BBC" > the BBC.
 * No need to link the club again here.
 * "FIFA world cup Qualifiers", capitalise World Cup. Add links for the World Cup, Bangladesh and the 2011 ICC World Cup.
 * "the first game of 2019-20 I-League campaign" >the 2019... Also the season range requires an endash.

Controversy

 * "when during the 2019-20 I-League first leg Kolkata Derby", endash for the season range and no need for the season or Derby link, both used previously.
 * Probably worth mentioning why the NRC was controversial amongst the fans.
 * "political groups making an issue of the situation", this sounds a bit like taking sides and needs to be more neutral.

Chants and slogans

 * "East Bengal Ultras has always" > have always...
 * "that echoed through the stands", too journalistic.
 * No need to link the side again and amend the Liverpool link to F.C., rather than FC.