Talk:Eastern Air Lines Flight 663/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC) Comments: I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) "a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
 * 2) "Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
 * 3) The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
 * 4) "The Navy" sounds colliqual.
 * 5) The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
 * 6) Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?
 * "a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
 * ✅ changed to "Eastern Airlines".
 * "The Navy" sounds colliqual.
 * ✅ changed to "United States Navy".
 * Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
 * The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
 * The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
 * All✅ did some rewording, and reorganized the paragraphs.
 * Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?
 * Only copyrighted image of the plane found - will do later if permissible.  Blodance  the   Seeker   09:45, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
 * I've added a pic of DC-7 into the article. Apart from this, I really don't know what else pics can be inserted into it. Any suggestions?  Blodance  the   Seeker   16:33, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
 * The article looks good now, so I will pass it. ---Dough4872 16:37, 26 January 2010 (UTC)