Talk:Eat You Up (BoA song)/GA1

GA Review
Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The single cover image requires an alt
 * You can remove the caption because it is the unanimous cover for the physical and digital releases
 * Please remove "Chart position", "Reviews", and "Miscellaneous" from the infobox

Paragraph 1

 * "It premiered" → "It was released"

Paragraph 2

 * "song's commercial appeal. Critics also felt it..." → "song's commercial appeals; they also felt it..."
 * If the song was on the chart for 12 straight weeks, could you add "consecutive" before 12?

Paragraph 3

 * "were directed for the single;" → "were created for the single;"
 * Can you rephrase the last sentence in this paragraph?

Paragraph 1

 * Instead of "On September 10," could you say "Two days later"?

Paragraph 2

 * The first 'p' in 'Pop music' should be lowercased
 * "The use of drum machines were overlapped..." → "The use of drums machines was overlapped..."

Paragraph 1

 * Italicize "AllMusic" please
 * "song. Sullivan highlighted..." → "song; Sullivan highlighted..."
 * Italicize "Idolator" please
 * "positive in their review. They commended the..." → "positive in their review; they commended the..."

Paragraph 2

 * Instead of using just "Greg", you said user "A reviewer" since "Greg" is just so informal
 * "in his review. He commended the..." → "in his review; he commended the..."
 * In the above comment, you could also use "praised" instead of "commended"
 * Instead of "&" you should say "and"
 * Remove the link to "Asian Junkie"; it's unnecessary

Accolades

 * Put quotation marks around "21 Greatest K-Pop Songs of All Time List"; capitalized 'songs' as wel

Commercial response

 * Reword to "The single charted on US Dance Club Songs chart; it debuted at number 42 and peaked at number 27 for the week ending December 27, 2008."

Music videos

 * "plan" → "planned"
 * The rest is great!

Paragraph 2

 * Reword the first sentence please; it's a bit confusing

Paragraph 3

 * In the final sentence, change "label" to "labelled"

Track list

 * Rename section to "Track listing"

Credits and personnel

 * You could columnize this so it's more compacy

End of GA Review:
Great job! Per standard procedure, I shall place on hold for seven days. Great job as always! Carbrera (talk) 03:28, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Done and dusted! :) CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 03:29, 4 April 2016 (UTC)