Talk:Ecco2K/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 22:59, 6 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) I'm going to be reviewing this as a part of the July GA backlog drive. I should be done with my review within a few days. 03:04, 18 July 2024 (UTC)

Please see my review below. There are some edits to make before I can pass this as a GA. I'll leave you seven days to consider my suggestions; if you need more time just let me know, no worries. Thank you for your nomination and let me know if you have any questions! Kimikel (talk) 03:27, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

Lead
Lead section seems out of order, it goes from 2013 to 2004. Should be reordered to be more chronological
 * "Having experience with graphics software since he was 5" > After gaining experience with graphics software from the age of five
 * "Alaska, and later joined the Swedish shoe brand Eytys" > he also joined Swedish shoe brand Eytys as a designer.
 * "release EP PXE"> release the EP PXE
 * "and Crest in 2022, the latter with Bladee" > and the collaborative studio album Crest in 2022 alongside Bladee.
 * All done!

1994-2012

 * Arogundade was raised in Stockholm with his mother and in London with his father; he lived briefly in London, being mostly raised in the Hornstull area of Stockholm > "For a short time, he lived with his father in London; he spent most of his childhood with his mother in the Hornstull area of Stockholm.
 * "5. His dad" > five. His father
 * "create covers" > create album covers
 * "His interest for graphic design later expanded to include illustration and photography." > He also later became interested in illustration and photography.
 * "16-years-old" > 16 years old
 * "he managed to do that by talking online" > he managed to create the brand through online communication
 * "didn't know of his age" > were unaware of his age

2013-present

 * "adopting the alias Ecco2K since then"> remove "since then"
 * "Originally part of Smög Boys, the four left and decided to create their own group"> The four had previously been a part of the musical group Smög Boys, before deciding to start a collective of their own.
 * "started playing his first solo live sets" > began to perform solo live sets for the first time.
 * "The next year, he walked the runway for Alyx Studio at Paris Fashion Week, and served as a panelist for the first "Challenge the Fabric" competition at London Fashion Week." > The following year, he modelled at Paris Fashion Week for Alyx Studio; he also appeared at London Fashion Week's "Challenge the Fabric" competition as a panelist.
 * "released his debut solo studio album, which was also a surprise album, E."> released E, his debut solo studio album, which was also a surprise album.
 * "29 January, and" > 29 January and
 * "24 February, and" > 24 February
 * "where Arogundade" > in which Arogundade
 * "both released"> Arogundade and Bladee released
 * Went with "they released" here
 * ""recorded amongst nature"." > recorded in the Swedish countryside
 * "a collaborative single with Bladee and Thaiboy Digital, "TL;DR", was released" > Arogundade released a collaborative single with Bladee and Thaiboy Digital titled "TL;DR".
 * "Ecco2K played" > He performed

Musical style

 * "the lyrics aren't about the members, but "everyone else"" > their lyrics often reflect universal human experiences, rather than specifically their own.
 * "Regarding his work as Ecco2K, Arogundade tried to keep distance between the project and his personal identity: "Ecco is something I do; it's not who I am"> Arogundade has maintained separation between himself and his music, explaining that he does not see Ecco2k as representative of who he is as a person.
 * "wrote to Pitchfork that, along with Bladee, Arogundade produced dissociation music" > wrote for Pitchfork that Arogundade produced "dissociation music"
 * "sprite". Greene said, "The..." > sprite," adding that "the immersion...
 * Did something similar; another sentence in between needs separation so it doesn't get too long.
 * "Writing for the same website," > remove
 * "noted Ecco2K for his" noted Ecco2k's
 * "lyricism". Over"> lyricism, but that over
 * This makes the sentence too long.
 * "hyper-rap subgenres" and, in 2019, his debut album E consolidated his futuristic sound" > hyper-rap subgenres," consolidating his futuristic style with E in 2019.
 * "music videos for others"> music videos for other artists
 * "he said he is "trying" > he stated that he attemps to "express..."
 * "Arogundade initially tried to maintain his privacy and secrecy. For some time, his Instagram account was private, and he doesn't like to publish much information about himself" > Initially, Arogundade attempted to maintain privacy and secrecy regarding his personal life; until 2020, he kept his Instagram account private, as he dislikes making his own personal information public.
 * Until 2018 according to the source, but done.
 * He tried to distance himself from his "obsessive" fanbase, finding it strange that he's "such a big part of other people's lives", but found it difficult as, in his words: "I had my phone and my social media hacked by my fans, I've had music stolen and leaked by my fans, and I've had family members contacted". > Although he has attempted to distance himself from Drain Gang's "obsessive fanbase", in the past, his fans have hacked his cellphone and social media accounts, leaked his music, and contacted his relatives. He commented that he found it "strange...to be such a big part of other people’s lives."
 * "Arogundade is particularly known for constantly changing his hairstyle" > since this whole paragraph is related to his privacy/personal life, this sentence would probably fit better in the previous paragraph.
 * Decided to delete it as it's trivial information.

Verifiable
[9] and [23] the only citations that have the website name wikilinked. The rest should be wikilinked for consistency

Spot check:

 * [3]: Verified
 * [7]: Verified
 * [10]: Verified
 * [16]: Verified
 * [26]: Verified

Broad

 * Broad in its coverage

Neutral

 * Neutral

Images

 * Images are tagged and usable
 * I believe the caption for the picture of Bladee mischaracterizes him as just a former classmate. Maybe something like "Benjamin Reichwald (Bladee, pictured in 2016), a frequent collaborator of Arogundade"
 * Done

Stable

 * No issues with stability

Everything above was applied, except where noted Skyshifter   talk  05:39, 21 July 2024 (UTC)


 * @Skyshifter Just went through and made a couple minor changes of things I missed. Other than that, I couldn't see anything else in this article that prevented it from being GA status, so I'm going to close it here as a pass. Thank you for your prompt responses and positive contributions, and congratulations! Kimikel (talk) 19:26, 21 July 2024 (UTC)