Talk:Edgar P. Rucker/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 19:07, 22 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: West Virginian (talk · contribs) at 19:16, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Prose

 * and businessperson — how about "businessman"?
 * Thank you for this suggestion! I have modified this to businessman accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * as the 12th Attorney General of West Virginia — my understanding of MOS:JOBTITLE says that 'Attorney General' should be lowercased
 * I've changed instances of attorney general to lowercase. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * ran as a Republican — we were already told in the first para that he was a member of the GOP
 * I've removed that additional mention. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * While Rucker was at an early age, he and his family relocated to Lewisburg in Greenbrier County — how about "During his early years, Rucker and his family relocated to Lewisburg in Greenbrier County"?
 * I've modified this accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * in which Rucker shot and seriously injured Beirne v. Rucker allegedly fired the first shot, breaking Beirne's wrist (emphasis mine) — is it a fact, or just a claim that he shot.
 * Per the news articles, this is a fact and not a claim, so I have modified the sentence accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Rucker was arrested and bailed after the duel; however, when Beirne's condition worsened, Rucker was rearrested and jailed — can break into 2 sentences removing the semi-colon
 * I've split this into two sentences accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * of the Flat Top Monitor Republican newspaper — How about "of the Flat Top Monitor, a Republican newspaper"?
 * I amended the wording as suggested. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Rucker took a great interest in politics — Do we need to mention great. Even I take "great interest in politics"
 * I removed the "great." -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * as the Republican candidate — as their candidate
 * I've changed this accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * At the start of Rucker's term — Replace 'Rucker's' by 'his'
 * I've changed this accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * n response to Wheeling saloonkeepers banding — WP:SOB
 * I linked Wheeling earlier so as to avoid the two links being side-by-side. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Though I like, I feel that there are a lot of "equivalent" in "Attorney general" section. Try to reduce few
 * I removed an inflation template accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "quiet and unpretentious affair." — the prose does not make clear where this quote comes from. Who said it?
 * I added in the newspaper that reported this quote. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * at 5p.m. — add between 5 and 'p.m.'
 * I added this template accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Rucker was survived by — Can we rephrase. I'd expect this wording more in an obituary or news article than a encyclopedia article.
 * I removed that sentence all together. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:43, 22 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

 * 1 images missing ALT text.
 * I've added the alt text accordingly. -- West Virginian   (talk)  22:44, 22 January 2022 (UTC)