Talk:Edinburgh International Climbing Arena/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:17, 11 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Sorry about the delay in getting to this. I'll try and address these points in the next few hours. Jamesx12345 15:40, 15 March 2014 (UTC)

Comments A few issues so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:04, 13 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Lead is a little on the light side. Could be expanded a little to summarise a bit more of the history and functionality of the place.
 * Have expanded somewhat, more to come.
 * "After facing financial problems months after opening..." after .. after... repetitive.
 * Reworded.
 * "GB£" not sure this is strictly required, could just link £ if you're really concerned that a reader won't know what a British pound is.
 * I tend to use GBP as it adds a non-breaking space, but I'm happy to change it if you think it looks cluttered.
 * " program of works" programme (unless we're American or writing computer applications).
 * Good spot.
 * Any history on the very first version of the quarry, i.e. when the first one was dug out?
 * I couldn't find anything more than the sentence beginning "Originally used for supplying stone..." It wasn't an especially noteworthy quarry, but I'll do a bit more research.
 * I'd love to find the actual history of the quarry, but there seem to be a huge number of quarries in the area and I don't want to get the wrong one. Jamesx12345 16:37, 15 March 2014 (UTC)
 * "work had been done." yuck to "done", perhaps "carried out".
 * Reworded again.
 * "SportScotland" looks like it's spelled "Sportscotland".
 * Another good find.
 * "cost to be GB£7 million, with GB£1.5 million coming" -> "with funding of £1.5 million to come from..."
 * Much nicer.
 * "During... during" repetitive.
 * Fixed.
 * "When it opened in September 2003, it was the largest..." perhaps "When it opened in September 2003, the arena was the largest..."
 * Done
 * You linked "indoor climbing" in the lead, but just "climbing" here, be consistent.
 * Removed link to climbing.
 * How did the estimate go from 7 million to 22 million? Important...
 * The BBC article just gives "problems" - there doesn't appear to be a simple reason, but losing part of the roof can't have helped. Acknowledging it makes it somewhat clearer though.
 * Would link "bouldering".
 * Linked in first instance.
 * "The articulated climbing wall." no need for the full stop on the caption, it's not a complete sentence.
 * Removed full stops from all captions.
 * But don't overlink bouldering!
 * Fixed
 * No need to link common terms such as "gym".
 * Fixed
 * Never overkeen on galleries, would suggest that contextual images are used in contextual places throughout the article instead.
 * Removed
 * BBC News or BBC News? Be consistent with italics.
 * There was an accidental cite web which renders differently (not many people seem to know this!)

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:43, 18 March 2014 (UTC)
 * "IFSC World Youth Championship, 2010" IFSC is mentioned in the caption but nowhere else.
 * Added link to world championships.
 * I know it's picky, but you still haven't mentioned IFSC in the prose. Just in the caption, albeit linked.  The Rambling Man (talk) 19:11, 18 March 2014 (UTC)
 * It was actually a mistake with the name. Thanks for bringing that to my attention. Jamesx12345 19:30, 18 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Suggest you avoid that left-aligned image....
 * I thought a bit of variety would be good, but it looks better with them all to the right. I've added another Clear to keep the layout tidy. Jamesx12345 16:17, 18 March 2014 (UTC)

Promoted, well done. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:42, 22 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Thanks. Jamesx12345 21:45, 22 March 2014 (UTC)