Talk:Edmund Ætheling/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LT910001 (talk · contribs) 01:55, 20 October 2013 (UTC)

If there are no objections, I'll take this review. I'll note at the outset I've had no role in editing or creating this article. I welcome other editors at any stage to contribute to this review. I will spend a day familiarising myself with the article and then provide an assessment. Kind regards, LT910001 (talk) 01:55, 20 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for waiting. In conducting this review, I will:
 * Provide an assessment using WP:GARC
 * If this article does not meet the criteria, explain what areas need improvement.
 * Provide possible solutions that may (or may not) be used to fix these.

Commentary
Comments:
 * This is a very well-researched article
 * My main comment when reading this article is that it lacks contextual information, which makes it hard to read. This is particularly true in the lead, which could be fleshed-out by one or two more sentences explaining who the kings were and/or why the two were fleeing, and the births and marriage & death section, where some contextual information regarding the characters, or at least an extra sentence or two to pad out these information-dense paragraphs, is suggested. (This is a bit nebulous as a comment, I know, but I do feel that these two paragraphs are hard to read)
 * This image: File:Szent_gell%C3%A9rt_2.jpg, has a copyright flag (although being almost a thousand years old I'm not sure how it could be copyrighted...)
 * If possible, would value if a pronounciation key was added after the name, to show how the name would be pronounced. This is not a requirement for GA status but I feel would improve the article's overall quality.

Apart from the short lede, which needs a little more expansion, this article can certainly get to GA status in a short timespan. I will provide a (very-quick, I expect) thorough read-through when the concerns above (image, lede, readability) are resolved. LT910001 (talk) 07:54, 21 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your feedback. To spare myself some work, I'll try to go through these issues now:
 * I've re-written the lead, which I found a bit entangled myself, but I don't understand what is difficult to read in the Marriage&Death section.
 * There was no problem with the copyright, the PD template just wasn't filled in properly, which I hope it now is.
 * Excellent! I'm sure we can both sleep easy tonight (...). LT910001 (talk) 07:36, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
 * I've added a pronunciation key. Cheers,  Alex  (talk) 14:59, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks! I'd say your simple change to the lead makes all the difference. I also note that you've been the primary creator and editor of this article, over only a month. With no outstanding issues I'm promoting this to GA status. Well done! LT910001 (talk) 07:36, 22 October 2013 (UTC)