Talk:Edward Hammond Clarke

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Peer Review
I think the article offers very important insight into Dr. Clarke. I know that this page did not exist before you decided to write about it so I commend you for choosing an unexplored Wiki topic. Kudos. The article itself would be organized a little differently, although I think that the material there is very good. For example, I think you can clump together the Views on Education and Publication sections into one. I do like that transition from Medical Practice into Publication section. It does work very well. There are a few sentences in the Medical Practice section that could be developed a little more. I think if you are going to the line, "As he became more well-known, most of his patients were in the upper middle class" that could maybe include one or two more lines about why this happened. I don't think it's really obvious that him becoming more well known would mean that more of his patients would be in the upper middle class. Was there something about him that made him pursue a certain clientele? Also, when mentioning that, "He was the epitome of a great physician" I think that is a statement which should also be discussed a little more or at least backed up with another example of why this is true and who actually thought this. Overall, awesome job! Jshamul (talk) 22:21, 4 May 2017 (UTC)

I think the article is very well researched. There are some comments I would like to make regarding this article. First, I think there is lack of information on the historical aspect of Edward Clarke. The article has ample information about his personal life and publication, but lacks information on his role and impact to the American medical society. Also, the title "Publication" seems a bit misleading since the main point of that section is regarding women's right and education. The only "Publication" aspect is the first line of the paragraph. Lastly, some grammatical issues. Some sentences are very short, on the verge of being choppy, and some sentences are very long. This drastic difference between sentences make the article a bit difficult to read. However overall, I think the article is very well written. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.220.160.159 (talk) 13:47, 1 May 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I think your article provides a lot of information and does a pretty good job explaining Clark's views on Education. But I believe some parts can be tweaked to make the article better. The sections could be organized to clearer parts. For example, a biography section could encompass many information in the first two sections. The last couple sentences under the section medical practice, could be placed in a biography section. Furthermore, the last section on his views on education is a bit redundant with the section prior to it. For the last little part in the publication section, you could expand and answer how Clarke used Darwin's theories to justify his own beliefs. Lastly, the sentence stating "he was the epitome of a great physician" is a bit subjective and should be reworded to make a more objective statement. Samuelkou (talk) 01:45, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

The article is very well informed, but it was flagged as needing an expanded introduction to better summarize the main points. I added the main points from Clarke's life in the body to the introduction.Turnerhamilton (talk) 03:40, 8 April 2019 (UTC)