Talk:Edward I. Devitt/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:03, 3 March 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's it, nothing drastic here at all. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:18, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * " to Boston, Massachusetts at a" GEOCOMMA after Mass.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  23:48, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "in Frederick, Maryland and" ditto after Maryland.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  23:48, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * After the first mention of his name in the lead, you use "he" eight times in a row, might be worth mixing it up with his surname a little bit for variety.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  23:49, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "He held the position for three years" both positions? You previously mention him taking on two roles.
 * The two were always held by the same person. They were essentially just different functions of the same office.  Ergo Sum  23:50, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "November 26, 1840 in Saint John, New Brunswick in modern-day " comma after 1840 and Brunswick.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  23:50, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * James Bayley or James Roosevelt Bayley? Be consistent.
 * Fixed.  Ergo Sum  23:51, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "were surprised by his appointment" any insight as to why?
 * I'm not sure. I could speculate, but the source doesn't really give any indication.  Ergo Sum  23:52, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "were considered lackluster" by whom?
 * Added some minor detail. The source speaks very generally, but it seems to indicate that it was his colleagues; the actual language it uses is "many of his friends and admirers".  Ergo Sum  23:55, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * "January 26, 1920 at" comma after 1920.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  23:56, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review.  Ergo Sum  23:56, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
 * De nada. It's all good for me, thank you for your good work as always and your prompt addressing of my concerns.  The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 23:57, 9 March 2020 (UTC)