Talk:Edwin Donayre/GA1

GA Review
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--  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:34, 17 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your comments. I've copyedited the "Commanding General" section, so hopefully it is more clear now to which general it refers. In the same section, those are not hyphens but rather endashes. They do not appear as html entities thanks to User:Cameltrader. El Mercurio is now italicized. The source for the info on his early life is the same as that for his military career, the Peruvian Army web page. I have merged both paragraphs to make this more evident. As for a pic, as hard as I've tried I have not been able to find one, sorry. Greetings, --Victor12 (talk) 23:19, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

I hope you don't mind me butting in here, but I have a question of my own in regards to coverage: there is barely any information on Donayre's early life and military career. Would it be possible to expand on these? For example, it is mentioned that he has served in areas under state of emergency and in frontier regions. What exactly did he do while serving in these areas? Also the following is just a list of appointments, and should be expanded to include Donayre's role and servititude in each: "He has held several command posts, among them commander of the 20th Combat Engineer Battalion, director of the Army Engineer School, commander of the 2nd Infantry Brigade, commander of the Southern Military Region, and commander of the Central Military Region.". Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 00:07, 18 December 2008 (UTC)


 * The problem is that it is quite difficult to find more info on his early life and career as most of the written material on him in English as well as in Spanish deals with his tenure as commanding general. This is why the early life and career section has just one reference: Donayre's bio as published in the Army's homepage. --Victor12 (talk) 23:42, 18 December 2008 (UTC)
 * The article is broad in its coverage relating to the topic. If that's the only information available, then its fine, as long as its fully sourced. Thank you to Victor for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) If you feel that this review is in error, feel free to take it to a GA review. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 00:33, 19 December 2008 (UTC)