Talk:Edwin Flack/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:47, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's it for a first run. I'll put it on hold while we go over the details. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:51, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Lead is a little slim for an article of this size.
 * Would add non-breaking spaces between 800/1500 and metres throughout. --I never understood non-breaking spaces very well. I think I did as requested but not sure.
 * No need to link common terms like "accountancy". ✅
 * "Davey, Flack & Co.[4][2]" order those refs. ✅
 * Avoid single-sentence paras. ✅ except for when I felt the previous paragraphs were unrelated
 * " middle distance and distance running " do you mean "long" there, i.e. "middle and long distance running"? ✅
 * No need to capitalise C in colonies. ✅
 * "was 2nd in" second. ✅
 * "A keen athlete in Victoria," I think given the preceding paragraphs, this doesn't need to be stated. ✅
 * "intent on attending the coming inaugural Olympics while in the city of New York" I don't understand this. ✅
 * "880 yards (804.67m)" these conversions are not necessary (and not done the first time round in any case). ✅
 * "W Bennett " -> "W. Bennett" ✅
 * ", in the marathon, " with rather than in. ✅
 * " Olympics He lost in" missing full stop. ✅
 * " Australian postage stamp in " postage stamp is an easter egg link. -- Link removed
 * Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles. ✅
 * Avoid spaced hyphens in ref titles, they should be spaced en-dashes. ✅
 * Ext link, spell out what ADB means. ✅
 * Could add "people from Islington" as a category. ✅
 * The changes you've made are great. The lead is still too slim though. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:57, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
 * How does it look now? Dat GuyTalkContribs 17:16, 3 April 2020 (UTC)