Talk:Effects of the 1928 Okeechobee hurricane in Florida/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 03:35, 21 January 2017 (UTC)

Will do. YE Pacific Hurricane  03:35, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Thereafter, it moved further inland across the Southeastern United States and became extratropical" link to eaxtratropical cyclone at the end here. YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "However, Gray still issued storm warnings from Miami to Titusville and also advised that "every precaution should be taken in case hurricane warnings should be found necessary on the east Florida coast."" link to tropical cyclone warnings and watches. YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "At the latter, the storm also downed power lines, telephone wires,[28] and trees, and destroyed car garages.[27] The storm left two fatalities in the city.[29] " change one of "the storm" to "the hurricane". YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "Additionally, the building then being used as city hall was partially destroyed." just say "city hall". YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Wiki page of Greenacres says it was incoperated in 1926 but this one says it was incorporated five years before 1928. Which is right?
 * City website says 1926. So I was wrong--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "In Lake Worth, 600 homes were destroyed and damaged 1,500 other dwellings, leaving about 700 people homeless" the destroyed homes damaged 1,500 other homes? YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Is it really necessary to mention 22nd and 23rd street? YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 06:03, 22 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "Mar-A-Lago, which currently serves as the "Winter White House" for Donald Trump's presidency, suffered little impact other than uprooted trees and the destruction of a large Roman-style window, according to then-owner Marjorie Merriweather Post. Rodman Wanamaker's house, known as "La Guerida" and later the "Winter White House" during the presidency of John F. Kennedy, suffered heavy damage during the storm.[26] " given that there was little damage, what's the point of this sentence? Should be removed tbh. YE Pacific Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 02:43, 29 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "The Royal Park and Southern Boulevard (State Road 80) bridges were washed out." just say "Two bridges on State Road 8o were washed out". YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 02:43, 29 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "Floodwaters persisted for several weeks, greatly impeding attempts to clean up the devastation. On October 23, over five weeks after the storm, Florida National Guard Major B. M. Atkinson reported 2 ft (0.61 m) of standing-water along the side of the roads to Belle Glade, Okeechobee, and South Bay. Burial services were quickly overwhelmed, and many of the bodies were placed into mass graves. Around 75% of the fatalities were migrant farm workers, making identification of both dead and missing bodies very difficult; as a result of this, the count of the dead is not very accurate. The Red Cross estimated the number of fatalities at 1,836, which was taken as the official count by the National Weather Service for many years (and exactly equal to the official count for Hurricane Katrina). Older sources usually list 3,411 as the hurricane's total count of fatalities, including the Caribbean. However, in 2003 the U.S. death count was revised as "at least" 2,500, making the Okeechobee hurricane the second-deadliest natural disaster in United States history behind the Galveston Hurricane of 1900; a mass grave at the Port Mayaca Cemetery east of Port Mayaca contains the bodies of 1,600 victims of the hurricane.[72]" why is this in the Okeechobee section? Shouldn't this be at the before you start talking about specific locations? YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 02:43, 29 January 2017 (UTC)


 * "The first relief train was rode by U.S. Senator Joseph T. Robinson, the Democratic vice presidential nominee during the election that year." is this important? VP's weren't really that important at the time. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 02:43, 29 January 2017 (UTC)

All in all, rather terrific read. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  06:30, 21 January 2017 (UTC)