Talk:Effie Maud Aldrich Morrison/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "in the United States," no need to link.


 * "Cumberland County Welfare Board" any link for Cumberland County?


 * "Massachusetts on January" comma after Mass.


 * "(1871-1954)" en-dash.


 * "Aldrich(1880-1970)," space before ( and en-dash.


 * "got a job as an " ->"was employed as an"


 * "Building. the two were" The.


 * "Philadelphia in 1915" the following year.


 * "and in 1917 her" and the next year


 * "and she was running" no need for "she".


 * "In May of 1931" May 1931.


 * "her son have filed for" -have.


 * "where she came up with a concept " where she developed a concept.


 * "initiated a series of contacts" what does that mean?


 * "who passed the concept" what does that mean?


 * "Leon Henderson. Henderson" repetitive.


 * "the Roosevelt Administration" not sure Admin needs a capital A.


 * "He transmitted the idea to First Lady Eleanor Roosevelt, who shared the concept with her husband" ehhh?? So, the idea was shared amongst a bunch of people.  I'm not sure we need the Chinese whisper version here!


 * "Thence" bit archaic.


 * "the Works Progress Administration as" put (WPA) after this.


 * "spent $30,000 to build" inflate.


 * "town of Millville, which" overlinked.


 * "300 acres" convert.


 * "cottage style" hyphenate.


 * "for $7 per" etc etc, inflate.


 * Link "stroke".


 * That's all I have Doug, enjoy. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:06, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll get started on resolving the issues tomorrow, after a good night's sleep.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:14, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Couldn't resist. Addressed all the issues today. Can you take another look at it. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:20, 6 September 2021 (UTC)