Talk:Egon Mayer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 23:00, 22 November 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this article first thing when I get home from work tomorrow. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 23:00, 22 November 2014 (UTC)
 * Is it well-written? ✅
 * 1. "and claimed his first aerial victory in this campaign" - Merely a suggestion, but I would suggest replacing "this" with "that" as the current word could come off as present tense.
 * done MisterBee1966 (talk) 18:35, 23 November 2014 (UTC)
 * 2. "World War II in Europe began on Friday 1 September 1939" - I suppose it's matter of taste but ... is it really necessary to mention what specific day of the week the war began?
 * I don't have a strong opinion about this other than I think this day should be rembered. MisterBee1966 (talk) 18:35, 23 November 2014 (UTC)
 * 3. "named after the after World War I fighter pilot Manfred von Richthofen" - I think by replacing "pilot" with "ace" the reader would get a better understanding. After all, there were thousands of German fighter pilots in World War I, but not all were top-aces like Richthofen.
 * done MisterBee1966 (talk) 18:35, 23 November 2014 (UTC)
 * 4. "Together with Georg-Peter Eder, Mayer developed the head-on attack as the most effective tactic against the Allied daylight heavy combat box bomber formations" - I recommend adding ", another fight ace," between "Georg-Peter Eder" and "Mayer developed" for clarification.
 * reworded MisterBee1966 (talk) 18:35, 23 November 2014 (UTC)


 * Is it verifiable with no original research? ✅
 * Is it broad in its coverage? ✅
 * Is it neutral? ✅
 * Is it stable? ✅
 * Is it illustrated? ✅
 * Another excellent article, MisterBee1966. The article meets the GA-criteria, but I need your opinion on my four points. Cheers. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 16:47, 23 November 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for your review MisterBee1966 (talk) 19:36, 23 November 2014 (UTC)