Talk:Einar Jolin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 17:51, 3 September 2014 (UTC)

Comments
The article was previously on hold at the nominator's request and is now ready to be reviewed.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 20:18, 7 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * If Jolin developed a type of Expressionism - is there a name for it? Or is the point that it's his personal style? Update Since you commented that it's his personal style: one approach might be to say "...best known for his decorative, slightly naïve Expressionist style." is one possible option for clarifying that it's his personal style.
 * Regarding "After studying at Konstfack, Stockholm in 1906 and at the Konstnärsförbundet målarskola (the Artists Association Art School), in 1908, Jolin and his friend Isaac Grünewald went to Paris for further studies at Henri Matisse's academy until 1914." To simplify the long sentence what do you think about having both years at the end of the sentence, like "from 1908 to 1914"?
 * "The mediums he used were mainly oil on canvas and watercolors" seems slightly awkward and might benefit from a tweak. Update based upon your request for a suggestion: "He mainly worked in oils and watercolor."
 * What do you think about additions to the lead - like where he traveled to (since it seems to be the subject of his works), a few career highlights, where he exhibited, and a bit of info about his personal life?


 * General
 * Art movements should be capitalized, like Expressionism in the intro. See MOS/Visual arts - Capitalization and art movements
 * Do you mind if I make edits for minor tweaks? Update I just going to try to limit the number of copy edits I make now that you've successfully got a GA under your belt. (Often, GA reviewers don't make any edits directly to an article + the less I edits that I make, the more you have control of the content). Where asked and where I think it might be helpful, I'll offer suggestions - but that's all that they are... you may have another way of wording it in your personal style. But I appreciate having your ok to make a few minor changes that don't really change the wording style.


 * Early life
 * Words: three story--> three-story (See English compound); Town house-->townhouse; an other--> another; home-->house (I don't see this in Words to watch, but I've been told not to use home.)
 * Regarding "artist aunt", which I think is an example of use of an attributive noun, I wonder if it's better to say "artistic aunt" or "aunt, who is an artist". It's just such unusual usage to bump these two types of nouns together. It would be helpful to get input from on this. ✅ aunt fixed. w.carter  -Talk  02:19, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * Wikilinks for Gustavian, such as Gustavian age. Even though this is a redirect, it's the appropriate phrase for the link, which could later be made into it's own article + links to other related artistic, etc. styles in that sentence.

--in progress, just saving for safety.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 20:44, 7 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Let's see if I can answer in an orderly fashion:


 * Lead
 * The point is that it was very much his own style, his trade mark.
 * Looking at the sentence now, it makes perfect sense. Please do. :)
 * I agree. That sentence was not "hatched" it was "contrived". Will think about it, suggestions welcome!
 * Why not? I was just afraid that the article would be "top heavy" with a longer lead. I'll just put it in my notes for tomorrow, it's too late for me to think right now.


 * General
 * Learned something new here. Thanks! :)
 * Please do. I've "gone blind" on the article for the moment...


 * Early life
 * My usual errors, not combining words. Please correct. :)
 * -- Thanks! w.carter -Talk  21:48, 7 September 2014 (UTC) ( aka The one who hangs out at the Teahouse to unwind )


 * Hello CaroleHenson, ( yes, it's in the middle of the night here, but my back is killing me so I thought a cup of tea and some edits might set me right. ) To be honest, I was baffled when you started to edit while reviewing!! I thought your role was to just point and say: That is not good. Re-do this. What does this mean? Etc. And instead you were helping me?? :) And what a lot of work you put into making me understand! But as you may have noticed, I'm eager to learn and try and rather good at taking directions, so I don't mind at all if the gloves are off now. Just say what needs fixing and I come up with a way to do that. Best, w.carter -Talk  02:00, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

[edit conflict]
 * When I look at the difference between these two versions, I am quite impressed by the level of effort that you've spent improving the article. It's a really good chunk of work - and I personally know how exhausting it is to do that amount of work to an article that you've already put a lot of time into... and then get comments about more changes.


 * That said, I think it would be good to re-use the method you described to me, which I'm guessing is how you made the revisions to bring it to the next level: "To scan the text for "bad bits" I read it out loud, envisioning myself as a news presenter at the BBC reading the five o'clock news" when you're ready to revisit it. There's no hurry here. Based upon your copy editing to the John Bauer article I absolutely know you can do it!


 * My concern is introducing my style with suggestions, etc... when you have a great writing voice.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 02:06, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * minor edits-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 02:14, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the reminder CaroleHenson. :) I'll let you know when I have tackled the things. Leade is expanded. You asked for a career highlight, I don't know how he saw it, but if I was an artist, selling a pic to Hammarsköld in the UN, would pretty much be it! Onwards and upwards, w.carter -Talk  03:25, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Ok, great! Yes - that sounds like a pretty significant career highlight to me. In the meantime, I'm updating comments in the GA review template - it's a work-in-progress.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 03:30, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Alterations
Just to clear out most of the notes here, I have made alterations to the article according to the specific pointers mentioned in the review. This does not mean that I'm finished with cleaning it up, just that the first stage is done. The big difference between this article and the previous review is clear: I wrote JB myself after being more used to the WP, EJ was translated from SweWiki = not "my own" (won't be doing that again...), and my first major article. Comments to match the points in the review: As to other notes: Aunt is fixed, lead expanded, styles are being capitalized. I think that's it for now. :) Best, w.carter -Talk  14:56, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * 1a. Fixed things pointed out. Will continue the search. Re-wrote "Elegant","Lo-.." and "puts". The tense is sometimes tricky since the things he did "Jolin painted" is past tense, but the paintings still exist so "they are in soft pastels" present tense. Most of the biographies are also written in the present tense as if the author was "reporting" his life while it happend = a trap.
 * 1b. Fixed mentioned. The hunt goes on.
 * 2a. Notes are fixed. [c][46] notes before ref is since the reader is most likely to look at the [] closest to the text, and it's more important to read the note that the ref.
 * Blogs and personal sites are replaced with solid refs. No original research is present as far as I know. Swedish language parameters are added. I tried to put English lang. par. in another article before, but those were removed by a Bot as redundant.
 * 3a. Added: "Jolin's style deviates from that of the traditional Expressionists in that he simplifies his motifs in an almost primitive way, painting an imagined reality rather than raw emotions." Primitive=naïve. Not going to explain "Expressionists", that is another article.
 * 6a. Pictures are very tricky since all of his paintings are owned by someone. At the time Pilg88 handled the upload and copyright. Because of the lack of pics of his works I added other related to him and his surroundings/inspiration. In one of the books there are pics of paintings from 1914 and earlier, that's a century ago, I'm guessing these may be scanned and used because of their age. Not sure though.
 * 6b. Fixed.


 * Sounds good, W.carter! As it's still a work-in-progress, I'll wait to look at the edits, rather than disturb your process. Yep, the tense does get tricky - I made a mistake myself and had to strike out something that was on the review that absolutely should be present tense. Regarding the language parameter, I found the same thing when I added that for the Ester Ellqvist article - I thought it would be nice to distinguish English/Swedish sources from one another, but I guess that thinking is that since this is the English WP, sources are assumed to be in English unless noted otherwise.


 * I like the way that you describe how he combined naive/Expressionism for his personal style - yep, you're right no need to go into explanations of the movements in any depth beyond how he used the aspects of the movement to create (sorry to be redundant) his personal style.


 * Regarding pictures, based upon the agreement with the US in 1923, that would be my assumption to. But, like you say - this is tricky.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:28, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * The pics all have valid licenses (or they did, but I don't think any have been added since I went through them) either as PD or as NFCC. If there are any issues please let me know. Philg88 ♦talk 16:36, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Ok, great! I just saw this - it looks like we're good per .--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 17:22, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Right! I've corrected, tweaked and re-written as much as I can find, so I think it's time for you to step in and see what you make of it. Glad that the pics got sorted out ok. Btw, have you noticed that there is a "Timeline for Einar Jolin's life" at the bottom of the article. I don't know if that is also on review. I just saw one at another article and thought it was fun to try it out here as well. Have a read-through and just tell me what I've missed. :) Cheers, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  21:12, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Ok, great! I have seen that you've been working hard - I'll take a look. Yes, I had seen the timeline, like it, and was wondering myself to what extent I'm responsible for reviewing the content for editing, accuracy, etc. Very nice idea!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 22:27, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Better than it may seem
Thanks!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 13:25, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * After another read-through of the article with the changes to the intro and a few other tweaks, I saw that the content was often written very well (better than me on my best days).
 * I added several things to watch out for in the review template, rather than finding each instance of the type of issue.
 * I might be wrong about needing to add "language" to all the references, since most of the references are Swedish. There might be a template or other solution that covers this rather than having to update all citations. Any input on this is appreciated!


 * @CaroleHenson:  No trouble updating the refs. I have this very nice script! :) <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter  <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  14:59, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Cool!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:30, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Works of art by Jolin
For the GA Review, section 6a deals with copyright status of images: "images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content"

My comments thus far are:
 * File:Einar Jolin - Interiör med ung dam (Ebba Pantzerhielm) 1915.png is said to not go into the public domain in Sweden until 2046. This image was made before 1923 when Sweden had a copyright agreement with the U.S. (See Non-U.S. copyrights). Does this mean it can be used for a U.S. article, but not a Swedish WP article? Reworded question: Does this mean we can or cannot use this file in this article?
 * File:Einar Jolin Stockholm från Söders höjder 1938.png qualifies as fair-use. Unless it's different for Swedish images, my understanding is that it should only be included in an article if there is no other work of art by the artist. See Non-free content policy. Which I would take to mean that this image should be removed.

This is not a topic that I'm extremely aware of... I just know that when I've worked on articles I can place one justified fair-use image on an article - but only one and only if there is no copyright free image available.

Does anyone have any insight into the images in the two bullets?

Thanks!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 03:55, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Please also see Talk:Einar_Jolin/Archive_1 and Talk:Einar_Jolin/Archive_1.


 * Based on the comments in the "Copyright and paintings" and above info, it would seem that the painting from 1915 is likely ok - in which case I would think the licensing information for the painting should be updated. It would be good to get this verified - and update the licensing info, if appropriate.
 * Regarding the fair-use image, I'm less confident based upon my (albeit not the best) understanding of Fair-use. It's discussed towards the end of this: Talk:Einar_Jolin/Archive_1--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 04:29, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Reworded 1st question.

I posted a request for assistance at Media copyright questions.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 16:39, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * I'll comment on the 1938 image from an NFC standpoint: there's no absolute restriction on having more than one example of an artist's work on their page however, if there are already other examples (and free ones to boot if the claim on the 1918 is true), then there needs to be strong demonstration of contextual significance (eg NFCC#8) to include. This is nearly always for the case of paintings the discussion by sources of a specific painting and commenting on it. Judging by the text present in the article, describing the nature of these scenery paintings, there's definitely room for a second painting image, but I'm not sure if that exact 1938 one is the right one. There is another painting specifically mentioned by name which would be a better candidate.  But perhaps the given example could also be improved on. Needless to say, you can have a second painting image there, there's no absolutely restriction on it, just make sure it's justified by NFCC. --M ASEM  (t) 16:43, 8 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Great! I'll let W.carter and others consider what image to use.


 * In the meantime, one of the criteria for the GA is that the images have the proper licensing tags. Do you mind looking at that? I was a little confused. And, do you have an opinion about moving the 1915 painting to commons? Thanks!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 16:49, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * I cannot 100% confirm the legal nature of the 1915 one, but the logic seems reasonable with other cases where, because we're storing things on US soil, we use US's definitions of PD and the like. Assumping this is true, both images have all the necessary elements and licenses for use here. (both have a license tag, and the NFC one has the rationale) --M ASEM (t) 16:54, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

I think it's best if we just keep the 1938 pic and I adjust the text accordingly. It has proved stable during many months. By sheer luck it is actually more appropriate than the ones mentioned in the text. As for the 1915 pic. It may be relevant to point out that it is owned by Malmö Museum, a museum that took part in the Category:Google Art Project works in Malmö Konstmuseum. No picture of it was taken during the drive though. <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  17:06, 8 September 2014 (UTC)
 * That's fine - I think the text is mostly all the way there that one example of these cityscape paintings would be easily justified, it would be better to have mention of the specific 1938 one in the text backed by a source. I'm definitely not seeing a super major issue that will prevent GA from happening here in regards to images. --M ASEM (t) 17:12, 8 September 2014 (UTC) ✅ <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter  <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  17:52, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

[edit conflict]
 * Wonderful, regarding licensing!
 * Sounds good, re: file use and adding the museum
 * This was so much easier to resolve than I expected!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 17:14, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Next...
Your edits are particularly good and have resulted in a fuller understanding of Jolin and his work. Now, comments are generally minor copy edits or requests for context or clarity.
 * Intro
 * 3rd paragraph - comma between Mediterranean Sea and especially --Fixed
 * UN building-->United Nations building --Fixed
 * Early life
 * Regarding: "Jolin loved his house and for his indoor paintings he often selected his props from things in the house – Gustavian and Empire style furniture, Chinese embroideries and East Indian tableware." Is the point that Jolin's house was decorated in exotic furnishings (great examples) that he liked to feature in his paintings? Perhaps a bit of tweaking that puts "loved his house" into focus and reduces the number of uses of "he/his" would be good. --Fixed
 * The wikilink for Chinese embroideries is Chinese embroidery. --Fixed
 * Regarding the quote: "The most amazing of them all was of course Isaac who had longer and more raven hair than anybody else and a fluttering violet scarf. I had not yet beheld such a creature." I'm left wondering: Why was he "of course" the most amazing of them all? What does it meant that he had "not yet beheld such a creature"? These seem like bold and poetic statements.
 * --?? Yes it is a rather unusual sentence, but it is an exact quote from Jolin. It starts with: "Jolin described the pupils at the school as" and then the quote are his words. I did not know that quotes from a person had to be explained? I don't know exactly what Jolin implied when he said that. I have added a ":" to make it more obvious that it is a quote. And again, I did not write this text, I translated it. Obviously I had to make many, many alterations to the text in the translation, but I tried to stay true to the original edtitor. I kept this sentence since just because it is a way of getting some colorful description into the text without violating the MOS. Thoughts?
 * Yep, I get your point about quotes not needing to be explained, but aren't they usually added to make a point or add context? If it's ok with you I'm going to follow the "be bold" part of the guidance for reviewers and research this and if something can be found, great. If not, let it go.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:10, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Why did the school close in 1908 (money? other?)
 * --I have no idea. That info is simply not available to me. There are some indications that the school was just supposed to be in operation for a number of years and cease to be when the contract ran out, but not solid enough facts to be put in the text. Is this really important? I mean "shit happens" and we don't have to explain it all.


 * Paris
 * For "Paris and its art community" - was there something about Paris aside the art community that was a motivating factor, or was it particularly its artists and schools?
 * --Seriously?? :) Jolin was 18, had money from his parents who were far away in Sweden and lots of friends his age... I can think of a number of things that would be appealing about Paris. :) It was THE place to be for these guys! They ate, drank, slept around with "Les Belles de nuit", went to shows, admired the vistas, went exploring the city, sat at cafés, etc. in a way they had never done before in Sweden. I have listened to interviews with Jolin (primary source, not to be included) were he speaks of the time in Paris, and even if the WP is not censored, I think we can skip that here in his biography. There is a photo of the Young Ones (read: the Wild Ones) outside a café (including Isaac in scarf and slouch hat) available if you think one should be added to the article. --- I have replaced the original with "for the vibrant life in Paris and its art community. I hope it is not too "peacocky."
 * This got blown out of proportion in my wordy effort to not suggest... I just meant a minor tweak.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:10, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Regarding "Carl Palme knew Henri Matisse,[18] and was now looking for a suitable location for the new Matisse Academy." Is Palme or Matisse looking for the suitable location? --Typo. Clarified in the text.
 * I'm not clear about the first three sentences in the 2nd paragraph. For instance, since he's going to school, I would expect that it "proved educational for him..." is the point that he explored new movements, other? If it's a lead in to the coming sentences, in which case it might be good to get directly to the points about his transformation / experience. I question the 2nd sentence. In the third sentence I'm intrigued by natural/spontaneous speed. What does "natural speed" as a distinction from "spontaneous speed" mean? (Is it the differences between painting in a comfortable, natural rhythm versus with more emotion? without forethought? as a stream of consciousness?)
 * --Again, not my text, just translated (you should have seen the text before I pruned it... not pretty... ) I have clarified what is implied in the original Swedish text. As to brushwork: "spontaneous speed"=without having to think about it, "natural"=being ok with working that way. I have rephrased it for clarity.


 * Return to Stockholm
 * Didn't the group become known as the Young Ones in 1909? --No, if you read the text in the first section it states that they "... would become known as... " They were not called "the Young Ones" or "The Men of 1909" until 1914. I have added "later" in the text for clarification.
 * Thanks!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:10, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Why was his residence in 1914 called the "Scandalous House"? Sexuality? Radical politics???
 * --?? But it IS explained why in the Note. Isn't that enough? What notes are for. There is even a pic of it showing just how tall and obstructive it is.
 * Sorry, I missed that. You absolutely did a good job with that.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:10, 9 September 2014 (UTC)

...stopping for the moment. Again, great job providing insight into who Jolin is. Little touches can make a huge impact, like the way you reworded the sentence about painting mediums to: "He mainly worked in oils and watercolors, using delicate brush strokes and light colors." It's lovely. I can visualize what his finished work might look like and how he worked. That's just one example of the ways in which you've taken what might be considered nitpicky comments and returned brilliant changes.
 * Regarding the sale of paintings: please add a comma before the "as at this" phrase. --Typo. Fixed.
 * What do you think about removing or slightly rewording the portion: "was able to show off his success,"? --Fixed
 * I don't understand this: "Jolin enjoyed life in the Danish capital since the Danish way of socializing and the varied company appealed to him" --Danes are generally more easygoing and less strict than Swedes. I have reworded that section.

Of the two types of issues, I'm not worried about minor copy edits like wikilinks, punctuation, spelling abbreviations, etc... and going forward I can pick those up (it seems silly because it takes me longer to type about it than fix it and on the whole you're doing a good job there).

But if you could read through the rest of the article for any places where the reader might be left hanging, that would be great. For instance, clarifying unexplained phrases that might pique the readers interest, or where the content could be a little clearer. It seems that the remainder of the article does not have areas needing clarification, but a double-check would be good.

It seems like there's some minor grammatical and copy edit issues in the reaminder of the article.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 03:43, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Hi! I have left my comments in italic in the previous post, it's easier to read that way. I will take a look again at the rest of the text when I get home tonight. When all the alterations here are done I'm thinking of removing the "translated from" box at the talk page. The article does not in any way resemble the original Swedish article. And I have vowed to never, ever, ever, translate an article again! I am always held responsible for someone else's text, fact or choice of words. And at the Wikipedia they DO shoot the messenger. Cheers, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter  <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  11:43, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Oh, my, for what I have done that makes you feel that I'm "shooting the messenger" I sincerely apologize. If I understand correctly, it seems that the main point is that you're being asked to reword or clarify things that you don't know or don't consider important in the greater context of the article. I absolutely goes against my intention to "shoot" the messenger and if there's any other feedback for what I can do differently - I want to hear it so my behavior or practices are in synch with my intention. I also know that I bring up things that other editors / reviewers might not. Obviously, it seems like I could use some coaching on approach, because you are such a rare person to work with that has both a remarkable cooperative, positive approach with others + a true desire to make good articles. I will outreach to a GA mentor about what I've done here for suggestions.


 * Regarding some of the clarifications I was talking about - some of them were really about simple editing - and I think if I had done that instead of trying to explain why in at least a couple of places, this would have gone smoother. Regarding the ones asking for clarification it was because a statement left an open question in my mind. For what it's worth, I did a recent clean-up / rewrite of an article that was riddled with "clarify" - "who" - "why" etc tags, which I absolutely know affected my approach here.


 * I'm going to make some copy edits and research on the couple of unknowns. We're so close here to have this situation go south. I'm not sure that I want to apologize for an intention to make a good article, but I absolutely regret that you felt that I shot the messenger.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 15:10, 9 September 2014 (UTC)
 * Absolutely no need to apologize!! This time it is I who should apologize for my poor choice of words. I think we're both getting a bit tiered due to this much back and forward. It was just a figure of speech. What I meant with it is that it is so much easier to explain or defend a text that you have written yourself and know every intention and meaning of. In my professional life I do a lot of translations (English to Swedish, not the other way around as is apparent) and in this capacity I am never held accounted for the content of the text itself, I'm just a translator, a messenger. But here at the WP I have to stand by every word I write, be it mine or someone else's, there is no difference. That is why this is so weird for me. There were never any trouble at JB, since I wrote all of that myself and could stand by every word. This here is just getting jumbled and that is why I will not make any more direct translations. Better to absorb info and write it myself. Hope that this clears up things a bit. Also, I know that I tend to go a bit "wild" on talk pages since I use a very restrained language in the articles. Bad habit, I know. :-/


 * You are doing an outstanding job in getting this article right, you just happened to be here when some pent up tension from some old discussions over translated texts got released, sorry about that! I'll just read and continue to tweak. :) All the best, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  15:37, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your response. The going back-and-forth is tiring; it might be good for me to take one day off on the review and come back with a refreshed perspective. I did post a comment on a GA reviewer's talk page: the process will likely be smoother for any GA review if I make tweaks in approach and/or the degree to which I pursue my own mental questions (I'm a very naturally inquisitive person - starting at 4 or 5 years of age with sociological and philosophical discussions with my father). Thanks for your comments and kind words.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 16:15, 9 September 2014 (UTC)

Slowing things down a bit sounds like a good plan for both of us. We've done a ton of work with two GA reviews in a very short time, and with me be still being a bit slow to get all the nuances at the WP, getting some air and a fresh perspective is always good. Being inquisitive is not a bad thing at all :), it's just that some of the finer details of the questions do get lost when you don't see the face or hear the voice of the one you are having the conversation with. Words are always taken far too literary if one is not familiar with each other's tone. (Does that sentence make sense?)

I'll stick to the previous plan and continue to hunt down things to correct, while you do something fun for a while. And if you come across some pics that needs fixing please send them my way. Working with things that does not involve word is relaxing for me. :) See you in a day or so! Best, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  16:37, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Excellent, sounds like a plan. Yes, I think I understand what you mean, without hand-gestures, facial expressions, and and my beloved pictures or diagrams. ;) Great point!


 * No need to respond: If you're interested in a mental break and you're not already familiar with the story, at one point I thought about truce, which led me to "Christmas truce" of 1914. It's unrelated to our topic - but one of my top 5 favorite stories of all time.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 17:08, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * And once again there is the Synchronicity. :) I know the story very well. Some of my great-great-great-relatives were part of it. Have a rest now. Ciao! <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  17:31, 9 September 2014 (UTC)

English sources and further reading
Realizing that Jolin had exhibitions in the states, I've checked around for English sources and unlike Bauer, there's quite a number of English sources that should be added... if nothing else, to further reading section. A Google book query for books with preview capability include these books.

Input is helpful, but I would think that at least the name number of English books as Swedish books for further reading would be good. There are five Swedish language books in further reading right now.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 04:53, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * I also posted this at Good article help#Einar Jolin.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 05:20, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * I did not realize that there were books in other languages about him. I'll weed out the top books in English and list them in the Further Reading section when I get home tonight. No need to include books that just mentions "a picture on the wall by Einar Jolin". Best, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  11:48, 9 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Sounds good. Of course, agreed, about only adding sources that really do have something meaningful to add - and if there's less than 5 books that meet that criteria, that's fine. The count was just my arbitrary thought - not based upon a guideline anyway.--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 13:46, 9 September 2014 (UTC)

I added three books to the Further reading section. The rest were just of the "a picture on the wall"-kind or encyclopedias. I looked at the rest of the text, and that little rush of adrenaline I got earlier seemed to have cleared my head since I saw so many more of my mistakes all off a sudden. :) Thanks! I think I'll have to let it go for now. Just tell me what new (or old) things you find on your next read-through. Best, <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">w.carter <em style="font-family:Verdana;color:DarkBlue">-Talk  22:56, 9 September 2014 (UTC)
 * Great work!--<span style='text-shadow:0 -1px #DDD,1px 0 #DDD,0 1px #DDD,-1px 0 #DDD;'> CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 18:53, 10 September 2014 (UTC)