Talk:Einar Mäkinen

Some suggestions
G'day Ljleppan. A few suggestions with this article: If all the above was addressed, this would be an easy Milhist B-Class. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:33, 15 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Lead and infobox
 * per Manual of Style, in the lead, Lieutenant General should be lieutenant general, but because the link is MOS:EASTEREGGY, consider using the Finnish rank and English equivalent in parens, ie Kenraaliluutnantti (lieutenant general)
 * a jager of the Jager Movement seems redundant, perhaps "an active member of the Jager movement"?
 * the highest rank in the lead and infobox isn't cited in the body
 * there are few mechanisms for declaring someone innocent. Usually the charges are dropped or they are acquitted at trial. In this case, if the charges were dropped, that is all that can be said, this action doesn't mean he was innocent.
 * a bit more context for the reader could be added to the lead (and body), assuming knowledge is generally not helpful. ie which side did he fight on in the Civil War (and what year(s) was in fought across), and who were the Finnish opponents and in what years with the latter two wars. A sentence fragment explaining what the Weapons Cache Case was would also be useful.
 * everything in the infobox needs to be in the body and cited to a reliable source, including battles he fought in, his date and place of birth and death, his place of burial, awards etc
 * Body
 * Introduce him using his full name
 * Is there any information about his early life? Parents, siblings, schooling, residence?
 * Explain what the Jager Movement was, and why Finns sided with the Germans, also move his initial rank to here
 * What battles did he participate in in WWI?
 * On which side did he fight in the Civil War, and explain who it was between and what months/years it was fought
 * avoid use of the word "would" to indicate future tense, just say he did, ie "and acted as a company commander in the White Guard"
 * any idea about when he was promoted to each rank?
 * suggest "During the 1941 Finnish invasion of East Karelia, a need was identified to clarify the command structure along the northwestern shore of Lake Ladoga, and Mäkinen was appointed to command the forces in that area, designated I Corps."
 * again, replace "would take" with "took"
 * who is Mäkelä?
 * corps'→corps, it is not plural
 * what is/was Parava Oy?
 * again, "would be"→"was"
 * see my earlier comment re: him being innocent.
 * Thank you for the extensive review, all these comments seem very helpful! I'll try to work them over the some time this weekend. -Ljleppan (talk) 07:22, 15 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I believe all of these are now handled. I also did a bit of general extension. Let me know if I missed anything or if you spot anything new problematic. –Ljleppan (talk) 15:36, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Great job, I have re-assessed for Milhist as B-Class. Thanks for your work on this article. Finnish military history is a sadly neglected area on en WP, so it is great to see an editor working in the topic. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:27, 17 October 2021 (UTC)