Talk:Ek Main Aur Ekk Tu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Secret of success (talk · contribs) 12:45, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

Hello. I shall be reviewing this article for the GAN in the coming days. Overall, the article is in a good shape, but it might require some work on the styling and prose. However, I will hold the review for longer than a week, as I would be quite unhappy if this failed. The issues can be found below :

Lead and infobox
 * "2012 Indian romantic comedy film" - "Indian" redirects to India. Perhaps, Cinema of India or Bollywood would be better.
 * "The film was produced by Karan Johar under the banner of Dharma Productions, while worldwide distribution was handled by UTV Motion Pictures." - The infobox lists out more producers. Please check with sites like Bollywood Hungama to verify it.
 * BO report of 40 crore seems to be estimated from 39.75 crore, listed by the source, and it is not the gross, but the nett.
 * "The plot centers around...over a period of two weeks." - Does not seem to summarize the entire plot. Needs to be worked on.

Plot
 * Plot should not exceed 700 words, per WP:FILMPLOT. This one comes close to 790, so please remove the less important details.
 * Insert Ram Kapoor into the section, as he seems to be a major character, given his mention in the infobox.
 * "over achieving father" - What does that mean?
 * "socialite mother" - Consider linking "socialite" to its article if it exists.
 * "However, he suddenly loses his job" - Does not seem clear. "However" contradicts what? Requires a re-wording.
 * "mental pressure breaking him down" - What does "breaking him down" mean?
 * "go to a therapist, where he meets" - "Where" is used to depict a place, and "therapist" refers to a person.
 * "a lot of loosening up and craziness" - What is "loosening up"?

Cast
 * "Khan added" - Added to what? The quote only describes his character. I believe it can be removed. The same can be said for Kapoor's role.

Box office
 * "grossed about 5.25 crore (US$1.05 million) nett" - Its either gross or nett. The entire section needs to be revised on this.

Soundtrack
 * I'm under the impression that File:EMAET album.jpg does not pass WP:NFCC. It should be removed.

References
 * Do not apply italics to BoxofficeIndia.com and dates.
 * What makes reference 8 (FV Current waves) a reliable source?

I think the article is being nominated prematurely. It doesn't cover up much aspects of the film making at all. --Meryam90 (talk) 13:10, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * comment:
 * I would be pleased if you could elaborate. I find it has everything needed. Lead, plot, cast, production (development, casting and filming), release, critic response and box office. I don't see what else is needed. Secret of success  13:12, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

I have made the changes that you asked for, except in the plot section. I'll look into it in some time. I have a question though: In the lead section, what change exactly do you want in the sentence "The plot centers around...over a period of two weeks." ? Smarojit (talk) 13:59, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * comment:
 * Summarize it well. You can have a separate para for the plot in the lead. See Zindagi Na Milegi Dobara for instance. If you need a draft, I'll do it. Secret of success  14:14, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. Summarized the plot in the lead section, and removed unimportant details from the plot section. Smarojit (talk) 15:48, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * As for the cast section, I have re-worded it, so that no information is repeated. The actors describe the characters themselves in the quotes, so I don't think that they should be removed. Smarojit (talk) 15:56, 12 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Not the best, but good enough. There is one more issue in the plot section, which I have noted above. It needs to be fixed. Secret of success  06:46, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

Production
 * "Pre-production work on the film began in July 2010 when Karan Johar announced his plans of making a new project with debutant Shakun Batra." - Source does not verify this. Secret of success  06:42, 13 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. Tweaked the production a bit, and provided a source. Smarojit (talk) 14:59, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

Final analysis
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