Talk:Electro-Dynamic Light Company/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * Again, lead is too short, needs to pick something notable, probably from each major para of the article.


 * Link patent.


 * And "incandescent electric lamp"


 * And "electric meter"


 * "The inventions were that" were those.


 * "first company formally" in the world?


 * "United States.[5][6][7] It was the first company" merge, "States, and was..."


 * "The U. S. Electric Lighting Company was organized in 1878, weeks after the Electro-Dynamic Company" is it not notable? If not, why mention it?


 * "and was granted" and which was..


 * Link electroplating.


 * "that whenever a flow of electricity was desired it is only necessary to turn on a switch to obtain whatever supply of electricity was needed" could tighten, e.g. "that whenever electricity was desired, it was available from a switched supply" (for example).


 * "an Electric Lamp or Burner" why caps?


 * "The names of other investor-partners " -> "Other investor-partners included.."


 * "twenty-eight years old and Man about fifty-two years old at" 28/52


 * " $10,000 cash and $290,000 of scrip" inflate, and what is scrip?


 * "40,000 degrees Fahrenheit" convert.


 * "carbon filament did not burn out and produced light instead" it produced light because it got hot right? Not because of lack of oxygen?


 * "What was unique of Man and Sawyer's lighting system patent No. 205,303, dated June 5, 1878, was " -> "Unique to ... was..."


 * "the Examiner of Interferences" link?


 * "arch shaped" hyphenate.


 * "U. S. Patent Office " link. And I imagine it should be US Patent Office. Or U.S. Patent Office.


 * Demise sentence can be worked into the History section.


 * Ref 22 needs en-dash.


 * "Wrege" source has a dangling comma.


 * That's it for my first pass. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:14, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. Will get started on it as soon as I can.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:44, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (Get vaccinated! ) 13:15, 2 September 2021 (UTC)