Talk:Elegy (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 03:30, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

I can't resist an episode that aired on my birthday! Will review it soon.  Ruby  2010/  2013  03:30, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

Comments

 * Lead's first para could use a copy-edit (too many sentences begin with "the episode..."
 * "the performance of Anderson was especially praised." -- you mention Anderson before explaining who she is
 * "...along with the words "She is me.". " -- double period
 * You say the episode is "unconnected to the series' wider mythology" but then mention Scully's cancer. I haven't seen the series, but what I've picked up on, isn't her cancer part of the mythology? Or am I mistaken?
 * "...but many were reluctant..." - I would re-write to "...but many establishments were reluctant..."
 * Where is the Thunderbird Bowling Center located?
 * What is a pinspotter carriage? Is there a good wikilink for this?
 * "then-unmarried wife" - you mean future wife?
 * "The series was allowed to filming in the location..." typo
 * Italicize the Shearman and Pearson book
 * "greater attention to the relationship... -- where does the quote end?
 * "...lauded Anerson's performance..."
 * in a manner that was "offensive at works and just plain idiotic at best". -- is that supposed to be "worst"?
 * The image could be enlarged

Otherwise, looks good. Placing on hold for seven days.  Ruby  2010/  2013  21:15, 11 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I believe I've gotten everything. Thanks for reviewing!-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   22:51, 11 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Passing for GA.  Ruby  2010/  2013  17:49, 12 January 2013 (UTC)