Talk:Eli Whiteside/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 21:06, 30 July 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 21:06, 30 July 2014 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * Any more on his college baseball career? Delta State's not going to have a huge amount of info since it's D-II, so if there's nothing then that's fine.
 * "He appeared in six games, making two important throwing errors before" perhaps say what the errors were and go into a bit of detail about them rather than just say "important" since then that's just opinion.
 * "but he remained in spring training with the Orioles until they made their final cuts on April 1." maybe make it clearer that he was demote/sent to Ottawa at that time.
 * "Before the 2008 season, Whiteside signed a contract with the Minnesota Twins." adding in a date could be helpful here.
 * I don't think the year subsections are needed in the Giants section, since the paragraphs aren't overly long.
 * "In 2010, for the first time in his career, Whiteside made an MLB team (the Giants) out of spring training." having the Giants in parentheses seems redundant.
 * "he was on the team's roster, throughout the playoffs" rm comma
 * "He was non tendered after the season" could we have a link for non-tendered? I know what it means, but non-baseball guys probably will have no idea.
 * He was claimed off waivers by the Blue Jays and the Rangers almost immediately afterward. What exactly happened there; was he DFA'd by Toronto too or was there something else involved?
 * "The two welcomed their first child, Whittington "Whit" Jackson Whiteside, in February 2010." getting a bit non-encyclopedic, just say they had a child.
 * The article in general feels a bit stat-heavy. Look around and see if you can find anything to make it more balanced. It's not easy to work around with a baseball article but see if you can.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 01:45, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  14:37, 2 August 2014 (UTC)