Talk:Elizabeth Riley

technical stuff

 * Add a comma after "afterwards" in the lead
 * For her children's names, you can list them as "Sarah and Ann Jackson" and "William Jr., George, and Eliza".
 * Add a citation after "apparently unable to write"

content stuff
Lacroixluvr99 (talk) 23:01, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Good chronology, clear lead
 * I think the "abolitionism" section could be renamed as "activism" as some of Riley's work was not strictly concerned with Abolition and was more community/church/charity oriented. Abolition could be a subheading with Riley's involvement in the anti-slavery societies.

Prof. Smith feedback:

Hi Benjamin,

I think you have an excellent start to your article and your revisions will be pretty easy to complete. You have done a lot of high-quality research here and, as always, your writing is strong and clear. Here are the revisions I would make: - Eliminate the "Trivia" section. There are some interesting facts here, but I worry that Wikipedia editors will take the article less seriously if it has a section of random and fairly unimportant facts like this. - I think that you're burying the lede in this story. Riley's primary significance, historically, is her involvement with the Minkins case. This is one of the four or five most famous and controversial fugitive slave episodes in US history. I would mention her critical role in your article lead (to establish notability right off the bat) and I would also put the Minkins case first under "Activism" rather than burying it down below a lot less important information about her alleged theft(which is bordering on being trivial). In other words, I would hit the Minkins case harder and earlier in the article and perhaps even give more detail about it if you can. — Preceding unsigned comment added by StaceySmithOSU (talk • contribs) 01:04, 1 December 2018 (UTC)