Talk:Elsa Chauvel

I really found this article interesting! Generally, it goes quite in depth and uses a good amount of strong sources. I just have a few comments of changes you might want to consider. Firstly, there were two instances of sources being directly quoted. One in the “Work in Film” section, in the third sentence, and another in the “Later Years” section, in the second sentence. I think you should consider rewording this information instead of quoting it. Secondly, I found many of the sentences all throughout the article quite choppy with lots of comma splices. I adjusted some sentences for clarity, but it might be worthwhile to try to remove some of the comma splices from the article — simply for clarity and the flow of the article. As I said, overall it is a very strong article, and most of the changes I made directly were for clarity or grammar! Bicyclepedia (talk) 22:01, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

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I really enjoy reading this page! The information is clear and succinct. I fixed few movie titles that should be linked, other than that, there's no minor mistakes. I really hope you can reedit the page, try to put sessions like "Marriage to Charles Chauvel" and "Work in film" together as "Career", then the page would be much easier to read. Overall, you have done a pretty good job !Kevinz233 (talk) 20:58, 31 October 2018 (UTC)