Talk:Embassy of Australia, Washington, D.C./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 02:06, 17 February 2024 (UTC)

Review

 * I am looking forward to reviewing this article.
 * Thanks for taking the time to review this one. APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 04:08, 17 February 2024 (UTC)
 * I think we can wrap up this GAN when you complete the items with ?. I will do my final checks when you have a look. Bruxton (talk) 01:57, 18 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Bruxton (talk) 04:29, 18 February 2024 (UTC)
 * I think all of the changes were made, although tbh, the quotes issue is confusing to me. APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 06:40, 18 February 2024 (UTC)

Lead
The lead is good. All of the facts in the lead are repeated in the body. The lead summarizes the content.

Spelling, grammar etc.

 * Lead - "The embassy employs over 250 people." consider "more than" instead of over ✅
 * Lead - "Australia was represented in Washington, D.C., by trade ministers." consider removing the comma ✅
 * Lead - "The new marble-clad modernist embassy opened in 1969." consider a rewrite of this sentence to let readers know what "modernist" means. ✅
 * Lead - "For around two decades the embassy... " consider a rewrite to "For approximately two decades, the embassy". In this sentence "around" seems colloquial and the comma seems appropriate after decades. ✅
 * Lead - "By the 2010s, the embassy was in need of serious repair." Instead of "was in need" consider just saying "needed" ✅
 * Lead - " (around $215 million US). consider changing "around" ✅
 * Lead - "After several years of planning and seeking bureaucratic approvals" perhaps remove "seeking" ✅
 * Lead - "projected price tag of $A236.9 million" MOS:MONEY is it "A$"? Also we need to use"US$" for the first occurrence of US currency ✅ The lead still shows $A236.9 and $154.7 million
 * ✅ I think
 * Early diplomatic relations - The first sentence runs on, consider breaking it up ✅
 * Early diplomatic relations - "Although these were not official legations, they were called as such in news reports" the words "called as such" is awkward. ✅
 * Early diplomatic relations = "second oldest" consider a hyphen ✅
 * 1700 Massachusetts Avenue NW - "The building was later sold in 1973 to the Peruvian government" consider "In 1973 the building was sold..." ✅
 * 1700 Massachusetts Avenue NW - "The embassy operated out of the Wilkins House, currently the Embassy of Peru and designed by Jules Henri de Sibour, beginning in 1947." consider "which is currently the Embassy of Peru and was designed by Jules Henri de Sibour". The last part of the sentence also is awkward. ✅
 * 1700 Massachusetts Avenue NW - "was eventually moved in 2009" consider removing the word eventually ✅
 * 1601 Massachusetts Avenue NW - "The sculpture depicts a kangaroo, emu" consider "an emu" ✅
 * Replacement - "a new building constructed on the site" consider "a new building was planned for the site" ✅
 * Replacement - Consider rewriting the first sentence which is awkward. ✅
 * Replacement - "A decision was made in 2014" consider "in 2014, a decision...." ✅
 * Replacement - "many traffic circle" should probably be plural ✅
 * Replacement - "In regards to the façade," I think "regard" ✅
 * Design - "One difference in the old embassy and new one" consider replacing in, with "between" ✅
 * Design - " restaurant with bar" missing "a". restaurant with a bar ✅
 * Design - "Describing his design for the new embassy, Bates said" Consider that it may need comma after said. ✅
 * Design - I do not know what this sentence means "It deferred to the language of Washington." we may need context ✅ I see now it was a quote
 * Design - I do not know what this sentence means "It deferred to the language of Washington." we may need context ✅ I see now it was a quote
 * Design - I do not know what this sentence means "It deferred to the language of Washington." we may need context ✅ I see now it was a quote

Other

 * I see we are using British english?
 * Where do you see that? APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 04:40, 17 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Word choices like "centre" and "synthesises" seem to be British variants
 * Oh, I only used them in quotes. I didn't think we were supposed to change quotes to American English. APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 05:12, 17 February 2024 (UTC)
 * No we are not supposed to change quotes. It is a small matter anyway. Bruxton (talk) 14:58, 17 February 2024 (UTC)


 * look over MOS:LQ and correct the location of the periods in this article. in some cases they need to be after the quotation marks. Like in this random example: "Miller wanted, he said, "to create something timeless".
 * I think it's been corrected? APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 05:12, 17 February 2024 (UTC)
 * for instance see the quote by Bates in the design section. The person needs to come after the quotation marks like I showed in my example above. MOS:LQ.
 * another example, might need a comma before the quotes, and period outside the quotation marks. Bates studio director Tim Leslie said it "is quite significant for Canberra...you are approaching this building from a multitude of different angles." should end like this ...different angles". When the quote is part of a sentence highlighting the quote, the period goes outside the quotation marks.


 * After many attempts utilizing "show preview", I *think* the issue has been fixed.

Images

 * There are 9 images which are free and properly licensed
 * the File:Northwest corner of Scott Circle - 1888 2008 2023.jpg uses image from several other files and it is probably licensed properly with the attribution in the file.

Scope

 * The article is complete without going into unnecessary detail.
 * I contemplated whether this belonged in Architecture or Politics and Government. The article is primarily about the building so I will promote it in Architecture. Bruxton (talk) 15:06, 18 February 2024 (UTC)