Talk:Emi Koussi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 20:12, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

I'll review this.  ceran  thor 20:12, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Prose

 * Lead
 * "sandstone plains" - link to sandstone maybe?
 * "are found both within the calderas and along the outer flanks of the shield" - I think the word "both" is redundant
 * "Emi Koussi was active over one million years ago" - as you probably expected, I think it should be "more than", not "over"
 * I would add the volume figure in the lead too
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:31, 4 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Geography and geomorphology
 * "Emi Koussi is the highest of these Tibesti mountains" - super redundant phrase here... better to combine with the intro of the mountain range name
 * "exceed 2,000 metres (6,600 ft) height.[5]" - is "in" missing before "height" here?
 * " Tibesti Mountains.[4] Emi Koussi is the highest of these Tibesti mountains[5] and thus of the Sahara;[6] many mountains of the Tibesti exceed 2,000 metres (6,600 ft) height.[5] These mountains " - "mountains" is repeated quite a lot in close proximity; anyway to rewrite these sentences to reduce that incidence would be great for flow
 * " the Tibu people lived in its summit caldera of Emi Koussi[9] " - why is "of Emi Koussi" necessary?
 * "Supposedly the entire Tibesti can be seen from the northern summits.[14]" - according to whom, exactly?
 * "ellipse-shaped caldera" - I'd replace "ellipse-shaped" with "elliptical"

More to come.  ceran  thor 17:50, 4 December 2018 (UTC)
 * Got these. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:31, 4 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Geology
 * "already between the Carboniferous and the Cretaceous.[5]" - a general time era (X to Y million years ago) would be helpful to a lay reader here, I think
 * "far-field tectonic effects of the collision between African and Europe have also been advanced as an explanation.[26]" - perhaps add a footnote or parenthetical to briefly explain the jargon of "far-field tectonic effects" here?
 * "The latter crop out at the southwestern foot of Emi Koussi, while volcanic rocks dominate north of the volcano and the Tibesti massif is prevalent east and southeast of Emi Koussi.[24]" - nitpick, but I think a comma would be useful before "and the Tibesti massif is prevalent..."
 * "also form the groundmass of or microliths in erupted rocks.[28]" - is the "or" here a typo?
 * "Rocks from Emi Koussi were used as raw material by Neolithic societies of the region.[29]" - any idea what for? ie. housing, weapons?
 * Got them, I think. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:31, 4 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Eruptive history
 * "Emi Koussi erupted between 2.4 and 1.3 million years ago,[37] it is considered to be of Pliocene-Quaternary age.[38]" - this should be a semi-colon rather than a comma; as is, it's a run-on sentence
 * "Radiometric dating has yielded ages of 2.42 ± 0.03 million years ago to 2.33 ± 0.09 million years ago" - elsewhere you've used ENdashes, but here you spelled out "to"; you should be consistent throughout the article
 * "1.4 ± 0.3 to 1.32 ± 0.2 million years ago;[13][41]" - same note as right above
 * "Emi Koussi is considered to be a Holocene volcano,[45] lava flows have buried Holocene diatoms beds in its caldera" - this is a run-on
 * Got these. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:31, 4 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Climate and vegetation
 * "Cattail and water milfoil grew around the lake.[32]" - "grew", or "grow"?
 * " Erica arborea is found to elevations of 2,900 metres (9,500 ft)" - "up to" this elevation, or "above and including this elevation"?
 * "which allow the development of a particular vegetation.[59][23]" - nitpick, but switch so that the ref order is ascending like the rest of the article
 * "over 3,800 kilometres (2,400 mi) away " - more than, not over
 * "Grew", as it's a former lake. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:31, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

Images

 * File:Emi Koussi Volcano, Chad From ISS.JPG - checks out
 * File:Chad_relief_location_map.jpg - checks out
 * File:Emi_Koussi_crater_natron.jpg - seems to check out
 * File:Emi_Koussi_Volcano,_Chad.JPG - checks out
 * File:Caldeira Emi Koussi ASTER.jpg - checks out
 * File:Emi Koussi inner crater.jpg - seems to check out

Will come back to do spotchecks once everything else is addressed.  ceran  thor 23:44, 4 December 2018 (UTC)