Talk:Endgame (Megadeth album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Novice7 | Talk 04:43, 14 December 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll start reviewing in one or two days. Sorry for the delay. Novice7  |  Talk  14:57, 23 December 2010 (UTC)

Lead
Done?
 * References in the lead are not encouraged. It's okay, still...
 * Billboard should be italicized.
 * The sentence about guitarist confuses me. Reword, maybe?
 * Remove the review by Slash. Twitter is not reliable.

Writing and recording
Re-worded it and made it more coherent.
 * Is it edition or episode?
 * Endgame was inspired by the movie Endgame written and directed also by Jones. – written and directed by Jones himself.
 * The next sentence is confusing. Why did he send a copy?
 * The album itself.. - remove "itself"
 * "The first preview of any song off Endgame was a six-minute video featuring Andy Sneap, describing the process of mixing the new Megadeth.." – what does this actually convey?
 * Remove the website after track listing.
 * "Dave Mustaine has said about the album" – remove "has"
 * Songfacts in not reliable.
 * Add he added to the end of the quote instead of "he adds", and source it.

Release and promotion

 * On May 10 - which year?
 * Again, TheLiveLine need not be mentioned.
 * Copy-edit may help.

Singles

 * Move the section down (below Critical)
 * Lead and first need not be together. Just one is enough.
 * Remove the Single cover.
 * According to Roadrunner Records official. It is Roadrunner Records' official website.
 * Why go way over detailed like mentioning time? Remove them.
 * Music video is not an award. Also, place this sentence near the download sentence.
 * Needs some sources.
 * 34 → thirty-four
 * No need to mention the number of nomination.

Critical reception

 * Inside quotes use ( ' ) instead of ( " ).
 * Slash review should be removed. Twitter is not considered to be reliable.

Track listing

 * Maybe sources?

Charts

 * Reference should be placed near each chart. Placing all of them together is not encouraged.

Personnel

 * Source?

References and links
Fixed, I believe.
 * Many references should be fixed. Billboard refs should be work =Billboard and publisher =Prometheus Global Media. Also, online websites should not be italicized. I'm unsure about reliability of many websites.
 * Do not make ref titles all capital letters. Also, if work =Allmusic, then publisher =Rovi Corporation. Also, orf.at is good, use this link to cite.

I have little understanding of audio file uploading, but if it's a major concern I could put out a notice for someone to upload one.
 * No Dab links
 * A dead link
 * Maybe, you can include a sample of a song?
 * It's not necessary. Novice7  |  Talk  09:38, 28 December 2010 (UTC)

More comments

 * There is a Dead Link and redirects Here.
 * The way you've used webcite is not correct. See for the correct syntax.
 * Why is the VG lista ref title in italics?
 * Remove Discogs from the Japan Bonus Track citation.
 * Do not overlink Blabbermouth
 * Again, I'm unsure about many sources like Everydayjoe.com, Ultimate-guitar.com, Bnrmetal.com, Metalassault, Metalunderground etc. Are you sure they are reliable?
 * Remove the align center from Album chart table.

Lead

 * Released on September 9, 2009, it was the second Megadeth album distributed through Roadrunner Records. – merge this with the first sentence and remove "it was the second Megadeth album" part.
 * Produced by Andy Sneap and Dave Mustaine, it entered the Billboard 200 at number 9, marking the band's tenth overall top 10 debut – reads as if the album entered the charts because Sneap and Mustaine produced it. Split to two sentences.
 * It was the first album featuring guitarist Chris Broderick, following prior guitarist Glen Drover's departure in 2008 and was the band's last studio album with bass guitarist James LoMenzo before Dave Ellefson replaced him in 2010. – Maybe rewrite as The album features Christ Broderick as the guitarist, and James LoMenzo as the bass guitarist.. Just summarize.
 * There are eleven tracks on the album – remove this part. Rewrite as The lyrics of the album were inspired by...
 * Move the third paragraph up and bring the now second para down.
 * and was thought of continuing the success from the band's 2007 album United Abominations. – remove this.
 * Also, couple the review from critics and chart together. See Breakout for an example.

Writing and recording

 * On the September 10th episode of the Alex Jones Show – doesn't quite fit.
 * Jones suggested that the title and – did he choose the title?
 * who was also the producer of Megadeth's last album, → who also produced Megadeth's last album.
 * Roadrunner Records and Mustaine viewed the album as a success, and rehired Andy for duties on Endgame → which album?
 * You have undid many changes. If you don't fix them, I'll fail the article.

I'll post more. Novice7 |  Talk  04:40, 29 December 2010 (UTC)

Good! On Hold Novice7  |  Talk  05:34, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * It's okay, but the prose could use some copy-editing. Many tense issues can be seen. Novice7  |  Talk  09:38, 28 December 2010 (UTC)

I've fixed up all of the concerns to the best of my abilities. If further issues need to be fixed, I will address those as well. Bruce Campbell (talk) 19:33, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
 * You reverted back all the corrections. I'm sorry, but I have to fail it for the time being. Novice7  |  Talk  04:54, 30 December 2010 (UTC)