Talk:Environmental impact of fashion/Archive 1

second dirtiest industry in the world??
This claim it is "the second dirtiest industry in the world" does not seem very well sourced. It cites a group called Ecowatch, and that relies on a quote from 'fashion industry magnate' Eileen Fisher. Booklung (talk) 20:14, 8 October 2018 (UTC)

Requested move 15 December 2018

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The result of the move request was: moved. (closed by non-admin page mover). feminist (talk) 12:02, 23 December 2018 (UTC)

Pollution in the fashion industry → Environmental impact of fashion – By moving it to this new name, it would be in line with other Environmental impact on ... articles Genetics4good (talk) 13:06, 15 December 2018 (UTC)


 * Support per consistency as stated above and it really is more of a encyclopediac article name than Pollution in the fashion industry.  JC7V (talk) 22:14, 17 December 2018 (UTC)


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Chart
A bar chart of the CO2 uptake of the various natural fabrics would be useful here. Also, a bar chart with the CO2 emissions of the (fossil-fuel-powered) machines (for soil preperation, harvesting, watering, transport, ...) would be required. Even a table with this info would be helpful. Genetics4good (talk) 11:51, 21 July 2019 (UTC)

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 January 2021 and 4 March 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Juliastephens, The Squirrel Genius.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:46, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review Feedback
-is the content added relevant to the topic? the content that was added is relevant to the topic, expanding on gaps in the original article.

-Is the content added up-to-date? The content added was all recent information (2019, 2021)

-Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e is the article more complete? The content added has improved the overall quality of the article and feels more complete.

-What are the strengths of the content added? The strengths are the environmental outcomes of the fashion industry which is definitely important to understand in today's world.

-Is the content added well written? The content added was well written and interesting to follow along.

-Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? The content added did not have any grammatical or spelling errors.

-Is the content added well-organized? The content added was well-organized and divided up into sections.

-Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? All new content is backed up by reliable sources of information.

-Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? The content accurately reflects what the cited sources say.

-Are the sources thorough- i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Sources are thorough and reflect the literature of the topic.

-Are the sources current? very current, 2021

-Is the content added neutral? content added is seems neutral, I do not know an opposing argument you can make. Unless one person believes the fashion industry does not indirectly hurt our environment.

-Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? There does not seem to be any claims that are biased in a particular position.

-Overall Feedback Great job, you have a lot done so far and it was a great read, interesting.

Kelseyhicks38 (talk) 19:05, 10 April 2022 (UTC)Kelsey Hicks


 * Thank you for the feedback Kelsey! I really appreciate it. I did not know if I was on the right path at all for doing this assignment so your feedback has made me believe that I am. Thanks again! Emilygabrielle (talk) 07:32, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

Article Evaluation
The article seems to have a relatively neutral position. It states facts about the environmental impact of fast fashion rather than providing biased claims that try to influence the audience or frame the topic in a particular position. For instance, the article describes the resources that go into fashion, and statistics about the consumption and production of fashion. It does not provide suggestions on what policies should be enacted regarding fashion and the environment, or a certain political stance or personal experiences that aim to persuade readers. LeahJou (talk) 06:48, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Article Critique
There should be a citation included after the sentences "Two of the main ingredients in pesticides are nitrates and phosphates. When the pesticides leak into stream systems surrounding the cropland, the nitrates and phosphates contribute to water eutrophication." . The information about pesticide ingredients seems to have been taken from another resource, and should be properly cited to give credit to the original source. The sentences appear to be either close paraphrasing or plagiarism without a citation. The facts provided in these sentences should be attributed to the reliable, original source. LeahJou (talk) 06:50, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Article Critique
The article has three different sections after the introduction paragraph. The viewpoints are generally equal, however the marine pollution section is underrepresented compared to the other sections, and could have more information on animals that are affected through this process, or the further environmental consequences that arise from fashion induced marine pollution. The section before described processes involving how the environment is affected through the natural fibers of clothes, however the marine pollution section could have a more detailed discussion of such processes involving marine life and how they are negatively impacted by clothing materials. LeahJou (talk) 06:50, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Wiki Education assignment: Public Writing Fall 2022 E1
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