Talk:Episode 4 (Twin Peaks)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 14:47, 7 September 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll take this! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:47, 7 September 2012 (UTC)

Comments

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 * Gordon Cole - A target?
 * Target? GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Like a link to Gordon Cole
 * Ah, I get you now. Done. GRAPPLE   X  23:41, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "the two are having an affair and planning to burn down the town's sawmill." - How are the two events related?
 * Pretty much every interaction between the two concerns both; they're in bed together talking about the sawmill, or they're cooking the books and having it off. There's no real causality in it, though, as far as I can tell. I could try to make things clearer if you'd like. GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * "confiscate the surgery's files to find who owns any birds." - Pardon?
 * Reworded a little; it's a tricky thing to convey since things like "patient" or "client" surely refer to the animals and not the owners. GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Confused by "surgery". Is that used as a location in American English? Perhaps "office's files"
 * Hmm, not sure about AmEng; I'd certainly use it (a local doctor or vet, like a General practitioner, would work from "a surgery"). I've changed it to "practice". GRAPPLE   X  23:41, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Oxford says that's BrE.
 * Standardise: Madeline or Maddy
 * Got it. GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * The Wild Wild West, Mayberry R.F.D. and The Fugitive - Contextual information for the uninitiated? Don't forget, Wild Wild West and The Fugitive may be remembered for the films (one good, the other a snark buffet)
 * Added the "1960s television series" bit from the lead to the other mention. GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * May 3 or May 5?
 * 3rd; not sure where I got 5th from. GRAPPLE   X  18:48, 7 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Spotchecks
 * From this revision
 * FN21 Fine, checks out
 * FN23 Fine, checks out

Further discussion
Thanks for your review; I believe I've seen to everything mentioned thus far. Let me know if there's anything else; and check this show out if you haven't already (though by now you probably know how it turns out). GRAPPLE  X  18:50, 7 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, I think that's it. I gave a light copyedit too so be sure to double check. Passing. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:45, 7 September 2012 (UTC)