Talk:Era Extraña/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:53, 7 March 2022 (UTC)

I will begin my review of this album today. --K. Peake 08:53, 7 March 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change the album to being listed as recorded from 2010 til 2011, as winter is not a month so should not be here
 * Pipe Tarbox Road to Dave Fridmann
 * Use bullet points instead of hlist
 * Remove dream pop because there is no source for that and synth-pop since only some songs are in the genre
 * Keep the singles in the infobox but write out their release dates in the release and promotion section, moving the refs there instead
 * The ref for "Polish Girl" gives a release date of August 3, 2011 instead of August 4
 * The English title should be italicised because this is an album
 * Decided to remove title. Skyshifter   talk  23:03, 8 March 2022 (UTC)
 * "released on" → "It was released on" as a new sentence to avoid a run-on; the initial release date needs to be written out in the body like any info in the lead does
 * "It was recorded between" → "The recording took place between"
 * "psychedelic pop, shoegaze and" → "psychedelic pop, shoegaze, and" with the wikilink
 * Add the release year of Psychic Chasms in brackets
 * "The record was generally well received by" → "Era Extraña received generally positive reviews from"
 * "with some reviewers calling it more focused, tight and" → "a number of whom called it more focused, tight, and"
 * "Psychic Chasms and some praising" → "Psychic Chasms, while some praised"
 * "that on this album," → "that on the album,"
 * "The album peaked at number 74" → "The former peaked at number 74" to specify what album you mean, also write this out in the body
 * "the band's first release" → "standing as the band's first release"
 * The tour is notable for the lead, so add a final sentence in the second para mentioning it was accompanied by a North American tour and when
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  23:03, 8 March 2022 (UTC)

Production

 * Retitle to Background and production
 * "where Palomo was living for" → "when Palomo lived there for"
 * "a Korg MS-20 and a" → "a Korg MS-20, and a"
 * "and the first weeks of production in Helsinki involved" → "with the first weeks of production in Helsinki involving"
 * Add the release year of "The Perfect Kiss"
 * "kind of challenge"." → "kind of challenge."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "He said, "It was an" → "He said that "it was an"
 * "evolved from there"." → "evolved from there"" since this is a full sentence
 * "Unlike the previous album," → "Unlike Neon Indian's debut studio album Psychic Chasms (2009)," with the wikilink
 * "that involved building up" → "via building up"
 * "composing this album," → "composing Era Extraña,"
 * [6] should be at the end of any sentence that uses direct quotations
 * "On Era Extraña," → "For Era Extraña,"
 * "He said, "The more" → "He said that "the more"
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  01:58, 9 March 2022 (UTC)

Composition

 * "psychedelic pop, shoegaze and new wave." → "psychedelic pop, shoegaze, and new wave." with the wikilinks and pipe
 * Wikilink chillwave
 * "joking that the album's genre" → "joking that its genre"
 * "Its instrumentation is cluttered" → "The instrumentation is cluttered"
 * Pipe synth to Synthesizer
 * Pipe samples to Sampling (music)
 * "laser sounds and" → "laser sounds, and"
 * Use a more encyclopaedic term than tight
 * Hm, not sure what I can use here... any suggestions? Skyshifter   talk  01:58, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Upon further consideration, this should be fine especially since the usage in reception is acceptable. --K. Peake 10:02, 9 March 2022 (UTC)


 * "were used as" → "are used as"
 * "and the record also included the" → "and Era Extraña also includes the"
 * Wikilink Nintendo
 * "describing other tracks" → "while describing other tracks"
 * "lazy summer vibe" → "lazy summer feel" per the source
 * "while it wasn't exactly a breakup album, it did" → "while Era Extraña is not exactly a breakup album, it does"
 * Again, ref(s) should be at the end of any sentences with direct quotations
 * "filtered drums and" → "filtered drums, and" with the pipe
 * Pipe reverb to Reverberation
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  01:58, 9 March 2022 (UTC)

Songs

 * ""Heart: Decay" and" → ""Heart: Decay", and"
 * Wikilink Game Boy
 * "with 8-bit particles" → "with the sound of 8-bit particles" per the source, with the pipe
 * "that is present on the album," → "that is explored on Era Extraña,"
 * [17] should be solely at the end of the sentence to avoid overciting
 * Allmusic → AllMusic with the wikilink
 * "of all of the songs on the record," → "of all of its songs," to be less wordy
 * Add the release year of "Reunion"
 * "as both songs depict someone" → "seeing a resemblance to its theme of someone" per the source
 * "and has melodies that" → "while observing melodies that"
 * Identify the Blurt writer
 * Add release year of Super Mario World
 * "the "joyful energy" of" → "the "euphoric energy" of" per the source
 * Add release year of Zonoscope in brackets
 * "while AllMusic noted the song sounded" → "while Phares noted the song sounds"
 * "grunge and garage rock." → "grunge, and garage rock."
 * [15] should either be after the song title or at the end of the sentence
 * Wikilink as timbres
 * "said there was "a haunting vagueness" to the song's slow" → "said there is "a haunting vagueness" to the slow"
 * "sounded like music for" → "sounds like music for"
 * "while Phares said it" → "while Phares stated it"
 * "on this track," → "on the track,"
 * Italicise musicOMH
 * Add release years of "Vienna" and "Out of Touch"
 * Wikilink as New Romanticism instead
 * "described it as" → "described "Halogen (I Could Be a Shadow)" as"
 * "Aizlewood compared the song" → "whereas Aizlewood compared the song"
 * "said the song sounded like music" → "said it sounds like music"
 * [14] should only be invoked once in the sentence
 * [15] should be after the song title instead
 * "It is at this point where, according to" → "At this point, according to Killian Fox"
 * Add the release year of "Someone Great"
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  00:07, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Release and promotion

 * Relevant release dates, like the initial one, need to be mentioned here
 * Pipe vinyl to Phonograph record
 * The 47-minute length is not sourced
 * Remove or replace the blog source per WP:SELFPUB
 * Add US Billboard 200 and other notable charts in this section, as it belongs with release when there's not enough for reception
 * Remove overly obvious wikilinks on Texas and New York City
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  00:07, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception per rankings also being here
 * Add AnyDecentMusic? to the aggregate scores
 * "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
 * "and an aggregate 7.2 out of ten on the site" → "Based on their assessment of the critical consensus, it was given 7.2 out of 10 on"
 * The year-end lists should be in a separate para at the end of reception because rankings don't belong with reviews
 * "it came in at" → "Era Extraña came in at"
 * "tight and cohesive" → "tight, and cohesive"
 * "while it did not have" → "while it does not have"
 * "it showed that the project" → "the album proved that the project"
 * "Hogwood called it a" → "Hogwood called the album a"
 * "turned the building blocks" → "turns the building blocks"
 * Italicise Consequence of Sound and pipe to Consequence (publication)
 * Put parts of that review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM, also any album titles need to be italicised
 * Remove the NME rating from prose since that is in the reviews box
 * "he called it" → "he called Era Extraña"
 * "was not as smooth as Psychic Chasms, but that Palomo's influences were" → "is not as smooth as Psychic Chasms, but that Palomo's influences are"
 * Italicise Tiny Mix Tapes and mention the reviewer by name
 * "calling it an improvement on Psychic Chasms and that it dunks" → "saw the album as an improvement on Psychic Chasms and said it dunks"
 * Wikilink MTV
 * "also called it an improvement" → "also noted an improvement"
 * "In more mixed reviews," → "Some reviews were more mixed."
 * "chintzy in places"." → "chintzy in places."" per MOS:QUOTE
 * "and also criticized it as" → "and also criticizing it as"
 * "did not have the" → "does not have the"
 * "aesthetic that Psychic Chasms had," → "aesthetic as Psychic Chasms,"
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  03:06, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Track listing

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅. Skyshifter   talk  03:06, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅. Skyshifter   talk  03:06, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Format → Format(s)
 * Label → Label(s)
 * All ✅. Skyshifter   talk  03:06, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; did not take too long! --K. Peake 11:47, 8 March 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅! All suggestions were applied. Skyshifter   talk  03:34, 10 March 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I did a few copy edits but the vast majority of issues had been resolved efficiently! --K. Peake 10:27, 10 March 2022 (UTC)