Talk:Eric Lock/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MisterBee1966 (talk · contribs) 16:11, 3 December 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments by MisterBee1966
Ok done. Dapi89 (talk) 22:13, 7 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * "Lock had his first taste of flying as a teenage but showed little further interest in flying until 1939" I find this a bit too colloquial! Maybe start with where and when he was born.
 * "He joined the RAF": first use of RAF should not be abbreviated
 * "offensive sweeps": is this a well known term for a offensive fighter patrols? Maybe link to combat air patrol?
 * nickname "Sawn Off Lockie": is not cited
 * Battle of Britain
 * link first use of Luftwaffe
 * "Lock flew as Red 2" is that a position or his aircraft?
 * "Lock followed it down. He quickly realised his mistake but it was too late." Why was it a mistake. Too colloquail I think
 * Last battles and death
 * "well-known RAF aces" well known to whom? Could be seen as POV
 * List of victories
 * (JG 54 — or Fighter Wing 54) and others: strike the or
 * Early life and career
 * last sentence, 2nd paragraph not referenced
 * Last battles and death
 * 2nd paragraph not referenced
 * Channel Front
 * 1st paragraph not referenced