Talk:Ernest J. King/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 21:07, 27 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 01:47, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Initial review
I plan to review this article. I have only glanced at the article so far and have no initial comments. Djmaschek (talk) 01:47, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Review 1
I need to quit now. More will follow. Issues are listed below. Either fix or argue your case for not fixing. Djmaschek (talk) 02:40, 2 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Well-written, verifiable, broad, neutral, stable, illustrated: These criteria appear to be met. However, details follow. ✅
 * Introduction, paragraph 3, last sentence: "Kittery, Maine" should have a comma after Maine.✅
 * Early life and education, paragraph 1, sentence 1: "Scottish Immigrant" - immigrant should not be capitalized.✅
 * Surface ships, paragraph 7: "Veracruz. escorting a mule transport" - comma, not period.✅
 * All done. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  19:16, 2 June 2024 (UTC)

Review 2
Issues are listed below. Djmaschek (talk) 22:26, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
 * While King's promotions and dates are listed at the bottom, some (lt. commander, commander, captain) are not mentioned in the text. Please add the promotions/dates to the text.
 * ✅ Added. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Suddenly, under the Submarines section, he has a commodore pennant!
 * It was a title of the senior captain, not a rank. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Aviation, paragraph 5, indented quote: "of a number factors" (of factors?)
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:24, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Aviation, paragraph 6: "wrote to the President [FDR]" ("the" not needed)
 * ✅ Deleted. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in the Atlantic (non-neutral): It's not clear to me, the reader, how this article is non-neutral. The article states that King was anti-British, but also that he was capable of getting along with certain Brits on a personal basis. How, exactly is that non-neutral? I only skimmed the long, tedious discussion on the talk page. Can you ask the challenger to remove this?
 * We have agreed on some changes, which I will incorporate next week. I do not have access to my books at the moment. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in the Atlantic, paragraph 1: "operation in the Mediterranean" (operations?)'
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in the Atlantic, paragraph 5, "gross register tons" (there is a link to this term)
 * ✅ Linked. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in the Atlantic, paragraph 7: "proved futile". (needs a closed quote)
 * ✅ Closed. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in the Atlantic, paragraph 9: "A wording was negotiated" (rewording?)
 * ✅ Re-worded. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
 * War in Europe, paragraph 1: "The U.S. Army planners that the Western Allies did not have" (something wrong with sentence)
 * ✅ Added missing word. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  01:16, 4 June 2024 (UTC)

GA class
I am going to approve this for GA class despite the existing non-neutral (POV) challenge. In my opinion as a reviewer, the article meets the GA criteria. Another editor can always add a cited paragraph to this article, giving another author's alternate interpretation. Djmaschek (talk) 22:50, 6 June 2024 (UTC)