Talk:Espenberg volcanic field/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:20, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Criteria
1. Prose ✅

2. Verifiability ✅

3. Depth of Coverage ✅

4. Neutral ✅

5. Stable ✅

6. Illustrations ✅

7. Miscellaneous ✅

Comments
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 * " largest maars of Earth." --> "largest maars on Earth"?
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * You link BP in the lead, but the link goes to the oil company, which is obviously wrong. This needs corrected.
 * Done, also in the other sentence. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * (No action needed) "8 by 6 kilometres (5.0 mi × 3.7 mi)" - MOS:NUMERALS discourages this, but it'll need to stay as is, due to the conversion template.
 * "which is partly separated by a small sand spit into a northern 5.1 kilometres (3.2 mi) wide North Devil Mountain Maar and a 3.4 kilometres (2.1 mi) wide South Devil Mountain Maar;" - Use of the phrase "into a ..." here just feels odd to me. Possibly change to "... into the northern ... North Devil Mountain Maar and the ... South Devil Mountain Maar ..."?
 * Changed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "At Kotzebue 60 kilometres (37 mi) northeast of the volcanic field annual temperatures fluctuate" - Probably better add commas to make it "At Kotzebue, 60 kilometres (37 mi) northeast of the volcanic field, annual temperatures fluctuate" since the clause in the middle is an appositive
 * Added commas. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Green alder thickets and willow grow on the maar benches,[23] at Tempest Lake north of Devil Mountain Maar the vegetation is characterized by a tundra featuring forbs, mosses, sedges and shrubs and is quite dense" - Make the comma a semicolon
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Again, you link BP to the oil company.

2.
 * Is there a way in the short refs like " Lenz et al. 2016, p. 597." to indicate which Lenz et al. 2016 is indicated without checking the page number ranges? If not, I understand.
 * I got one. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Spot check of refs is clean, as is the Earwig report.

3.
 * Mention in the lead that Espenberg is part of Bering Land Bridge National Preserve.

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Just a little tightening up necessary, placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 16:41, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * All done, I think. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:33, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Yep, passing. Hog Farm (talk) 23:17, 8 April 2020 (UTC)