Talk:Eustace Balfour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 06:54, 31 August 2014 (UTC)

Overview
The article is well-written, with a good lead and article layout. The sources are verifiable and there is no evidence of original research. It is written in a neutral point of view, is stable and has a good broad coverage without excessive detail. There is a good use of images, which have been checked for copyright status. The article is in great shape, there are just a couple of questions.

Content

 * I am wondering: why not name the individuals rather than just the titles in the introduction?
 * It looks like I already made the changes (yikes). Since there's no response about why it's better not to have their names, just leaving the changes and marking this ✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:24, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Is there a reason for repeating the social connections information in the Architecture section that had been stated in the Early life section (i.e., couldn't " Balfour's social standing appears to have been a significant factor in his appointment.[2]" stand on it's own without the following sentence?


 * Never mind, not all of it was duplicated, better to leave it alone.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:24, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * What is the point about France's father being shocked at the hasty wedding (did this impact their relationship, other)?


 * I love juicy stories, no juicy story. I wonder if it might have been because he thought that it would be hard for his daughter to find a mate due to her insecurity about her disability... who knows? ✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Open issue: still need to check for copyright / paraphrasing
 * It's looking good.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Regarding "writing widely about defence issues" - are there papers, books, etc. to use as examples?
 * Found The Conditions and Requirements of the Volunteer Force. If he's written extensively, it might be nice to have a section for his published works.✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Why was his offer to raise 1,000 men for the 2nd Boer War ignored?
 * Too early - added a note.✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * What did Balfour have to do with the 20K volunteers later called up?
 * I'm not seeing anything - marking✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * What controls were placed on the volunteers?
 * The date seems to be 1900 rather than 1902 - based upon the newspaper date.
 * The sentence was modified to "when he resigned in protest at financial controls that restricted payments to volunteers if the full contingent of the needed forces was not raised." - hopefully that works. I'm calling it ✅.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)

I've rewritten this in a simpler style that I've adopted since I did this on August 31st.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 02:27, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * Marked off a couple of quick ones... going to research the others.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:24, 28 September 2014 (UTC)


 * It looks good to me, just a few minor tweaks.✅-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 21:54, 28 September 2014 (UTC)