Talk:Evangelion (mecha)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 22:10, 7 August 2022 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing the article. It's kinda so it'll take some time. So far it looks good based on what I read but I suggest cutting some parts related with WP:Plot considering it details information I never heard about in the actual series or movies.Tintor2 (talk) 22:10, 7 August 2022 (UTC)

That's all for today. I'm not entirely confident but maybe the content of Original series could also be trimmed since it explores most episodes in the series.Tintor2 (talk) 22:30, 7 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * First of all the lead explains every single character who pilots the Evas with Mari's exception. Since this is meant to be an introduction I would say that "The Evangelions are pilot by "Childs" included the protagonist Shinji Ikari and other supporting character.
 * The image could explain the name of each Eva.
 * "classified by critics as cyborgs rather than mecha in the traditional sense." could be moved to the last paragraph since it deals with critical response rather than in-universe information.
 * Conception
 * First mention of Anno needs a wikilink alongside the anime's title.
 * Rei has a wikilink but it isn't explain who she is. I think Shinji is mentioned but not explained neither.
 * Mazinger too like "Go Nagai's mecha Mazinger"
 * The Proposal material is kinda fan cruft material since the audience is never told about it. I would suggest either trim it or removing it.
 * Characteristics
 * I would suggest trimming the amount of in-universe information like "Evangelion are giant humanoids clad in thick protective armor. The constitution of an Evangelion unit is identical to a human being's, except for size: each Evangelion is equipped with a nervous system, a skeleton and a circulatory system. On the fingers of 01, for example, there are nails similar to human ones".
 * Same with the amount of content focused on their weaponry.
 * I tried to do my best. The part about the Proposal or the in-universe information I would honestly say to leave them, because they are either hinted at in the other sections (e.g. the various equipment) or are useful for understanding other scenarios in the final version (e.g. the Eva Series, the anime-otaku question).--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 20:56, 9 August 2022 (UTC)


 * The commentary on "Rebuild of Evangelion" could easily be moved to the main series too and reduce small paragraphs and at least call Rebuild of Evangelion "Introduced in Rebuild of Evangelion".


 * Everything in the rest of the article seems fine. I would suggest tonning down the clothing from merchandise.Tintor2 (talk) 22:45, 9 August 2022 (UTC)

That's all.
 * Sure. Well, it would be more functional. I hope it works.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:48, 10 August 2022 (UTC)

Passing review. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 18:45, 10 August 2022 (UTC)