Talk:Everett, Washington/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jasper Deng (talk · contribs) 08:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

I will be making my complete review later; the first thing I noticed is, you should qualify "seventh-largest" by population, as by area, it appears to rank 9th. I suggest "seventh-most populous".--Jasper Deng (talk) 08:53, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria A few issues to address before it can be passed More things: Otherwise, it's probably ready.--Jasper Deng (talk) 00:08, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * In addition to the above:
 * 1) *"American settlement" – "American" is not restricted to non-native settlers. Use a different term.
 * 2) **Fixed.
 * 3) *"Everett became the county seat in 1897 after a dispute with Snohomish contested over several elections and a Supreme Court case." – I understand this is the lead, but this seems unnecessarily vague to me. "dispute" in particular could use an adjective.
 * 4) **I don't think an adjective is needed, given the explanation given in the second half of the sentence.
 * 5) *"Puget Sound was further explored and charted ny the Hudson's Bay Company" – typo, "ny" should be "by"
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) *"The railroad did not terminate in Everett as originally hoped, instead continuing along the shoreline of Puget Sound to Seattle." – hoped by whom?
 * 8) **Added.
 * 9) *"After outside investors withdrew in the Everett Land Company" – "in the" should be "from the"
 * 10) **Added "shares", as the investment was initiated by the investors, not vice versa.
 * 11) *"Everett itself suffered from a major fire on August 2, 1909, that destroyed 12 buildings, including the county courthouse." – the second-to-last comma is not needed.
 * 12) **Fixed.
 * 13) *"The Port of Everett was created on July 13, 1918, to enable public ownership of the waterfront and promote economic development in the city" – similarly, the last comma is not needed.
 * 14) **Per MOS:DATECOMMA, it is needed.
 * 15) *"The works program also built a new county airport, Paine Field, southwest of Everett that opened in 1936 to serve commercial uses" – "southwest of Everett" is awkward here; I suggest moving it before the first comma.
 * 16) **Moved behind instead.
 * 17) *"The population boom triggered construction of new housing areas around the peninsula and new schools, with enrollment in the Everett School District doubling to 11,600 from 1941 to 1951" – did it double exactly? More often than not it didn't start out with 5,800 students, so give the original number.
 * 18) **The source gives the 1941 figure as 5,990 and the 1951 figure as 11,628. A slight difference, but quite minor in restrospect. Added the rounded figures and dropped the doubling.
 * 19) *"Electronics manufacturer Fluke Corporation (now part of Fortive)" – "now" seems rather redundant here. Consider removing the entire parenthetical remark.
 * 20) **The change is quite recent and most sources have not been updated to reflect the new name, so I believe it's warranted.
 * 21) *"The city government does not plan to enforce the dress code ordinance until the lawsuit is resolved with the lifting of the preliminary injunction." – a little confusing in the context of the previous sentence; if the 9th Circuit ruled in favor of the city, what happened to the injunction?
 * 22) **Still pending. The appeal to the Supreme Court has not been processed yet, and the last newspaper articles are from February 2020.
 * 23) *The farmers' market should be capitalized as "Everett Farmers Market" seems to be the official name of the entity.
 * 24) **Done, but I'd also like to keep the link.
 * 25) *"an ameatur team" – typo; consider rewording as "are an amateur team... set to begin their... in the 2020... league" to remove the commas for better flow.
 * 26) **Reworded the sentence.
 * 27) *"The Port of Everett also has a large public marina and its own boat launch at 10th Street that also serves a ferry to Jetty Island." – This is rather awkward with two uses of "also". In particular, it isn't clear what the second "also" conveys here.
 * 28) **Dropped the first "also"; the second is meant to tie the ferry to the 10th Street boat launch.
 * 29) *"A public swimming pool was opened at Forest Park in 1975 and replaced by a permanent structure in 1984" – so the first facility was temporary? Consider clarifying that.
 * 30) **Fixed.
 * 31) *"The park is situated along Pigeon Creek, with recreational facilities on a plateau overlooking the ravine and several miles of hiking trails." – a plateau is usually considered to be a much larger landform (many square miles). Maybe use "hilltop"?
 * 32) **Fixed.
 * 33) *"Its bus rapid transit system, Swift has" – missing comma
 * 34) **Fixed.
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) *"The city's growth was not stopped by the fire and a new county courthouse opened in 1910 alongside the Everett High School campus" – "stopped" is not very academic in this context, maybe "hindered"?
 * 2) **Fixed.
 * 3) *The 1916 massacre's content should be perhaps cut down and given its own section with.
 * 4) **Cut and merged into a single paragraph, but given that it was a defining event in the city's history and has a buildup that needs explanation, I think the current size is fine.
 * 5) *"which pre-dated Everett" – MOS:HYPHEN: one word usually.
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) *List of neighborhood associations: Consider making into prose per MOS:USEPROSE.
 * 8) **I believe it fulfills WP:LISTPURP, in that it is a natural index that would be less coherent in prose. A similar example at Arlington, Washington did not draw complaints at FAC, and other examples for cities exist.
 * 9) *Similarly, consider the need for the table listing the teams of Everett; this seems redundant to the prose.
 * 10) **Tables for sports teams are fairly standard across city articles, especially to add championships. I have expanded it further by including former teams.
 * 11) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * Most would seem to consider the climate of the whole region to be oceanic, and the given climate data only supports a "dry summer" for one month. Consider prioritizing the description of the climate as oceanic.
 * Moved it up, but I am unsure what to do with the remaining Koppen sentence.
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * It took me an hour or so to read through the article; this is about as much content as I think is appropriate without becoming overwhelming.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * It may soon need updating due to the pandemic's effect on employment.
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * Perhaps use more images, particularly for sections that don't have any. It's understandable if no such images exist.
 * Will work on taking more photos once my camera is back in good condition (and likely during the post-pandemic recovery).
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold while the remaining issues, primarily pertaining to writing, are ironed out.--Jasper Deng (talk) 04:07, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have made changes as suggested, but also left comments where I feel there is a better option.  Sounder Bruce  09:38, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Perhaps use more images, particularly for sections that don't have any. It's understandable if no such images exist.
 * Will work on taking more photos once my camera is back in good condition (and likely during the post-pandemic recovery).
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * On hold while the remaining issues, primarily pertaining to writing, are ironed out.--Jasper Deng (talk) 04:07, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have made changes as suggested, but also left comments where I feel there is a better option.  Sounder Bruce  09:38, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have made changes as suggested, but also left comments where I feel there is a better option.  Sounder Bruce  09:38, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "which relinquished their lands to the territorial government and established the nearby Tulalip Indian Reservation, where they would be relocated." – should be "who", as these are all groups of persons.
 * Made the treaty into the subject.
 * "It is located primarily on Port Gardner Peninsula" – the Port Gardner Peninsula
 * Fixed.
 * "The city has a high rate of opioid abuse, particularly OxyContin and heroin, fueled by cross-state drug trafficking."
 * Added two stats from a 2017 report.  Sounder Bruce  00:45, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I think it is good to go now; I declare the article a GA.--Jasper Deng (talk) 07:41, 5 May 2020 (UTC)