Talk:Everybody Hates Hugo/GA1

GA Review
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Hello, I'll review this article according to WP:WIAGA. My reviews tend to be more peer-reviewy than necessary, but I try to help increase the quality of GAs a notch before giving it the green plus. Most (all?) of the points should be easily fixable.
 * Intro section: the information about the "raft" may need more information (a few words) for context
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "flashbacks reveal why Hurley is hesitant at his new job of distibuting food" - add "in the newly discovered Swan station", because it could also be misinterpreted as "why Hurley is hesitant at his new job of distributing food [at the fast food restaurant]" - there is also a typo
 * Done and Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Plot section: "Johnny pulls into a local gas station, to buy some beer" - comma wrong
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "At the hatch, Hurley struggles..." - make it clear that it is no longer in the flashback, e.g. write "At the hatch on the island, Hurley struggles..."
 * Instead I wrote "In present time at the hatch" because I thought that sounded a little better. Tell me what you think -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "won't" -> "will not" per MOS
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "Hurley then prepares to blow up the food with dynamite" - isn't it more like that he tried to blow up the pantry?
 * Changed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * This is more an advice for FACs, but in general, there is still some detail and redundance that can be trimmed in the plot section, like "Johnny pulls into a local gas station, to buy some beer, and notices news crews talking to the attendant. The reporters have arrived because they know the winning lottery ticket was bought there; the clerk recognizes Hurley and points him out. Johnny is stunned, and his expression clearly reveals that, despite his promise, everything has changed." -> "Johnny pulls into a local gas station to buy some beer, but notices news crews talking to the attendant. When the clerk loudly points out Hurley as the buyer of the winning lottery ticket, Johnny's stunned expression clearly reveals that, despite his promise, everything has changed."
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Production section: "Orginally Libby had been written" - typo
 * Corrected -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "and was going to be played by Jennifer Jason Leigh" - is there a reason why JJL did not play Libby in the end?
 * I will research that -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Update:I did some research and it looks like a read the source wrong. JJL was approached by the producers to play the part, but declined. -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:21, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "After after take of Hurley eating food in the hatch" -> ??? ("Take after take?")
 * Changed to "After each take of Hurley eating food in the hatch" -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "while Bose delievered his lines" - typo
 * Fixed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Reception section: "in key 18–49 demographic" - may be missing a "the"
 * Alright -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "The episode achieved a 9.4/22 in key 18–49 demographic. The 9.4 rating refers to 9.4% of all 18–49 years olds, and the 22 share refers to 8% of all 18–49 year olds watching television at the time of the broadcast." - sentence can probably be combined without making the explanation that obvious
 * Done and done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * "Hurley's backhround" - typo
 * Fixed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)


 * References: some references are missing the publisher. Please note that Lostpedia is generally pushing WP:RS a bit, and you should replace these links with the original sources of information where possible, leaving Lostpedia only as a convenience link, not the source itself.
 * I added publishers for references two and four so now that should be covered. With regard to the Lostpedia thing, would you rather me change ref 4 to a link of the audio podcast? Ref 5 was an interview done by Lostpedia and is not available anywhere else. Tell me what you think. -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd say link to the ABC podcast page and mention the podcast date; the people who want to learn what was said in an old podcast that's offline now, will find a way. The Lostpedia interview shouldn't be a problem, but it may be better to link to a original static version in the page history than to the editable version (I don't know the wikipedia procedure, but Lostpedia also has some occasional vandalism).


 * Images: The infobox image and the Libby image are fine, but I think the non-free image in the plot section is purely decorative and therefore doesn't pass WP:NFCC in my eyes.
 * Removed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:14, 26 July 2008 (UTC)

I can't detect anything wrong otherwise (broadness, stability, neutrality); the article is in a pretty good shape already. You have seven days to address the points above (I won't mind if you ignore some points as you see fit). I'll have this page on my watchlist, so just say here when you think you're finished. – sgeureka t•c 17:08, 26 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, the article easily passes as a GA now; other improvements like the one podcast link can be performed through normal editing. Give me a few minutes to do the bureaucracy. – sgeureka t•c 19:09, 26 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Alright thanks -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   19:37, 26 July 2008 (UTC)

Production
Rich Farmbrough, 00:22, 5 March 2011 (UTC).
 * 1) The van stalled when it was being pushed? A little odd surely.
 * 2) The "replacement food" - trivia too far? That's fairly normal film making stuff.