Talk:Everything Is Fine (The Good Place)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 16:13, 6 April 2021 (UTC)

I'm gonna be sniping this one because I love this show. Hopefully it shouldn't take too long!  Kncny11  (shoot) 16:44, 6 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * airing back-to-back with the second episode "Flying"." "back-to-back with the second episode, "Flying"."


 * "She realizes that she was sent there by mistake and must" "Eleanor, who was sent to The Good Place by mistake, must then"


 * "critics, praising" "critics, who praised"

Plot

 * Sits at 392 words without the parentheticals, good job!
 * ""The Good Place."" ""The Good Place"." per WP:LQ


 * Comma after "their total points are tallied"


 * "Also" "Additionally"


 * "she's not" "she is not"


 * Pipe "supplement" to Dietary supplement


 * "she's ever done" "she has ever done"


 * "While on a party" "while at a party"


 * "whether to help Eleanor or not" "whether or not to help Eleanor."


 * Mention in the first sentence that Eleanor insults Tahani at the party so that it makes sense later when talking about the things wreaking havoc


 * Inconsistent capitalization of the/The Good Place
 * to "the Good Place" besides first mention.

Development

 * "then untitled" "then-untitled"


 * Split the first sentence into two, i.e. "based purely on a pitch by Michael Schur. Schur told the network..."


 * "In deciding to work with Schur, a person he was a fan of, Goddard said" "Goddard, a fan of Schur's previous work, said..."


 * "before finding out that Schur"


 * "In finally reading the script," "After finally reading the script,"


 * comma after "that included all faiths"


 * "who are part" "who were part" (I mean, they are dead)


 * "a favorite series of Schur's."

Casting

 * "it was announced" "NBC announced"


 * "the first synopsis of the show was also released" (eliminate repetition)


 * comma after "own self-improvement course"


 * put "Chris" in quotation marks


 * I didn't read it as saying that Chris was renamed Chidi, but that Chris was an altogether fake character
 * Reworded.


 * put "Tessa" in quotation marks as well

Viewers

 * Rename this subhead "Ratings"


 * "This means that 2.3 percent of all households with televisions watched the episode, while 8 percent of all households watching television at that time watched it." "This means that it was seen by 2.3 percent of all households with television, and 8 percent of all households watching television at the time."


 * " With these ratings, The Good Place"


 * "second most watched" "second most-watched"


 * put "behind The Voice" in parentheses


 * Mention (from the Deadline citation) that after DVR increases, The Good Place became the most-watched comedy series premiere of the season

Reviews

 * Rename this subhead "Critical reception"


 * ""unique, fun TV."" ""unique, fun TV"." per MOS:LQ


 * ""ensemble needs work."" ""ensemble needs work"." per MOS:LQ


 * WL Vulture


 * ""clever, funny, and pleasantly familiar."" ""clever, funny, and pleasantly familiar"." per MOS:LQ

General comments

 * Article is stable
 * Images are good
 * Earwig score comes back very high at 79.8%. The plot summary is almost a word-for-word copy of the TVTropes recap page. Since TVTropes is another wiki, I won't fail the article for this, but revamping the plot summary to stray from that is probably a good move.
 * Rewrote plot summary.


 * With the above comment,, all of your suggestions have been addressed.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 17:24, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for doing that! Passing now. :)  Kncny11  (shoot) 23:25, 6 April 2021 (UTC)