Talk:Everything You've Come to Expect/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 21:46, 9 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:33, 17 June 2024 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
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 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

I will review this over the next two days! --K. Peake 17:33, 17 June 2024 (UTC)


 * Perfect! Thank you for reviewing the article, I'll try to respond to any inquiries in a timely manner. IXCat (talk) 18:02, 17 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I've fixed most of the notes you've left so far. Sorry for the messy punctuation. I'll fix it throughout the unreviewed sections as well. IXCat (talk) 17:22, 18 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Please change the infobox recording date to simply 2015 since Summer is not a recording month
 * Remove overly obvious wikilinks on major world cities in London and Paris
 * "It was produced in Malibu by" → "Production was done in Malibu by"
 * I think you should merge the string arrangement player into the same sentence as the other musicians, also you do not need a comma before and in British English
 * "in November 1969, the original picture" → "in November 1969; the original picture"
 * The maximalist production needs to be written out and sourced in the body
 * "blue-eyed soul, and psychedelic pop. It also draws influence from" → "blue-eyed soul and psychedelic pop, with influences from"
 * "funk, disco, and" → "funk, disco and"
 * "Its lyrical content explores themes of" → "The lyrical content explores themes of"
 * The lead is not only slightly disordered, the information is also lacking for enough paragraph sentences – please make the singles a full sentence for the album in the last sentence of the second para
 * "romance, and self-doubt," → "romance and self-doubt," with the pipe
 * Where is the nightlife part sourced in the body?
 * "generally positive reviews, with critics noting the" → "generally positive reviews from critics, who mostly noted the"
 * Start a new sentence at the welcoming of their style since reception can be two sentences
 * "It became the band's second and" → "The album became the Last Shadow Puppets' second and"
 * Add more info about the tour in the last sentence here please

Background and recording

 * Start a new sentence at the meanwhile part, although Colour of the Trap is not mentioned by the source
 * Start a new sentence at "This reminded" to avoid a run-on
 * "with it as well."" → "with it as well"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "Kane's apartment in London, Paris, and" → "Kane's apartments in London, Paris and"
 * "which they said was "the oldest song in the album"," → "which the Last Shadow Puppets said was "the oldest song" in the album," per where the source uses the quotes
 * Pipe Shangri La Studios to Shangri-La (recording studio)
 * "produced the album." → "produced Everything You've Come to Expect." since the title should be used by here
 * "The Last Shadow Puppets began recording" → "the Last Shadow Puppets began recording" per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * Re-invoke the ref after the sentence using the direct quote
 * "The band was also joined" → "The Last Shadow Puppets was also joined"
 * "The album was recorded" → "Everything You've Come to Expect was recorded"
 * Pipe United Recording to United Western Recorders
 * "nearby karaoke bar, and to" → "nearby karaoke bar and to"

Musical style and influences

 * Reword the img text to mentioning that this was both by critics and the band
 * "Musically it has been described as a "a" → "Musically Everything You've Come to Expect has been described as "a"
 * "soundscapes of the 1960s."" → "soundscapes of the 1960s"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Per British English, please do not have commas before "and"
 * The disco elements and Italian film scores are not sourced
 * "The Replacements,[20], Queens of the Stone Age,[24][20]" → "the Replacements,[20], Queens of the Stone Age,[24]" per MOS:THEMUSIC and removing duplicate usage of [20] when it does not mention Queens of the Stone Age
 * "Isaac Hayes and The Style Council, as opposed" → "Hayes and the Style Council, as opposed" per above
 * "and Serge Gainsbourg, "I always" → "and Gainsbourg, "I always"
 * "When You're in Love with a Beautiful Woman" should be surrounded by speech marks
 * "and The Prodigy as bands" → "and the Prodigy as bands"

Lyrics and themes

 * Quote box should have the song title in speech marks and context as to when Turner said the quote
 * Same issue as previous with commas before and
 * "Lyrically, the album's main themes" → "Lyrically, Everything You've Come to Expect's main themes"
 * Remove overly obvious link on sex
 * The recreational drug usage part is not sourced and pipe to Illegal drug trade
 * Jealously is not sourced and dreams is too obvious for a wikilink
 * "lust figures often,"[39] and described" → "lust figures often",[39] and described"
 * Wikilink Ennio Morricone
 * "the doomed protagonists."" → " the doomed protagonists"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "from their first album, and have been" → "from The Age of the Understatement and have been"
 * Remove the links and release years of Submarine and Suck It and See
 * "of Los Feliz, and cities" → "of Los Feliz and cities"
 * "such as Sheffield, and Paris." → "such as Sheffield and Paris."
 * "more refined," than the ones" → "more refined" than the ones"
 * "more surreal or abstract."" → "more surreal or abstract"."
 * "Further adding, "You still," → "He further added, "You still,"

Songs

 * ""Aviation", the album's opening track," → ""Aviation", the opening track of Everything You've Come to Expect,"
 * "scrape of strings."" → "scrape of strings"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "part of one iris is" → "part of one eye is"
 * "Its second verse uses the term" → "The second verse uses the term"
 * The "coke-head close" part is not sourced and you need a ref invoked here anyway since it uses a direct quote
 * "my mind for years,"[41]" → "my mind for years",[41]"
 * ""I think, not always," should not have a starting speech mark because the quote already began
 * "Musically, the track's been described" → "Musically, the track has been described"
 * "On "Miracle Aligner" the album its at" → "On "Miracle Aligner", the album is at"
 * ""lush" and "seductive."" → ""lush" and "seductive"."
 * "a "breezy melody,"[42] and makes" → "a "breezy melody"[42] and makes"
 * ""make-believe wrestler."" → ""make-believe wrestler"." although this quote is not sourced
 * "are "really old,"[42] with the song being" → "are "really old",[42] with "Miracle Aligner" being"
 * "Shadow Puppets umbrella."" → "Shadow Puppets umbrella"."
 * "saying, "is obviously about" → "saying, "it's obviously about" plus the full-stop should not be inside speech marks
 * "described as "honeyed soul-pop."" → "described as "honeyed soul-pop"."
 * "been called "Beatle-esque."" → "been called "Beatle-esque"." and the ref should be invoked here instead
 * "as "a jealous guy," among" → "as "a jealous guy", among"
 * Change to Bowie's album of the same name instead of David Bowie and add the release year in brackets
 * "my head,” was described as "textbook Turner lust."" → "my head", was described as "textbook Turner lust"."
 * "last song written for the album, and" → "last song written for Everything You've Come to Expect and"
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "to his dance music origins,"" → "to his dance music origins","
 * Remove link on funk
 * Move full stop to being outside of the quote for "Holy Mothership"
 * "violins,"[23] with "Iggy Pop-like intensity."" → "violins",[23] with "Iggy Pop-like intensity"." and remove the link on Pallett
 * "in Sonic's Rendezvous Band's "City Slang."" → "in Sonic's Rendezvous Band's "City Slang"."
 * "like, a punky edge."" → "like, a punky edge"."
 * ""career best vocal."" → ""career best vocal"."
 * "Its has a" → "The song has a"
 * ""lounge singer grandeur."" → ""lounge singer grandeur"."
 * "rider,"[20] with lyrics that" → "rider",[20] with lyrics that"
 * "comic self loathing."" → "comic self loathing"."
 * ""high-drama stabs."" → ""high-drama stabs"."
 * "it's one epic track," both likened" → "it's one epic track", both likened"
 * Remove link on Arctic Monkeys
 * Remove links on Suck It and See and Humbug
 * "track with "Isaac Hayes influenced" strings," → "track with "Hayes influenced" strings,"
 * "Lyrically being a" → "Lyrically, the song is a" and remove the speech mark from quote
 * "The album's final track," → "The final track of Everything You've Come to Expect,"
 * ""lugubrious and lizardy."" → ""lugubrious and lizardy"."
 * The Boardwalk → the Boardwalk per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * "up through Sheffield City Centre There" → "up through Sheffield City Centre/ There" and remove the links on these two cities
 * Remove comma after Los Feliz and the introduction of bandmate since we know it is simply Kane easily
 * "get it [...] slow."" → "get it [...] slow"."
 * "his "default position."" → "his "default position"."
 * "hero's lament,"[20] which stands" → "hero's lament",[20] which stands"
 * "to imposter syndrome."" → "to imposter syndrome"."
 * Remove wikilink on Lou Reed
 * "of Turner's serene Submarine."[26]" → "of Turner's serene Submarine".[26]" and remove the link

Artwork and title

 * "The album art consists" → "The art for Everything You've Come to Expect consists"
 * Remove wikilink on New York City, although this is not sourced unless the vrt ref has it mentioned in the audio?
 * Per the source, mention that he gave it a gold tint for a colour scheme and contemporary feel that resonates more
 * Change to simply Bowie
 * "artwork 2016. The prize was organised by" → "artwork 2016, a prize that was organised by"
 * "as the band thought" → "as the Last Shadow Puppets thought" plus the sentences using direct quotes need the ref(s) invoked, also why is Under the Radar at the end when it only backs up the first sentence?
 * "Turner has also described" → "Alex Turner has also described"

Release and promotion

 * "on the album sparked by a tweet from arranger Owen Pallett, album producer James Ford stated" → "on Everything You've Come to Expect sparked by a tweet from Pallett, Ford stated"
 * "with other shots of the band." → "with other shots of the Last Shadow Puppets." plus there is more synopsis from the NME ref that you can add here
 * "On 21 January, the band announced their album" → "On 21 January 2016, the Last Shadow Puppets announced Everything You've Come to Expect"

Singles and videos

 * Retitle to Singles, as they were all these with videos released
 * "The lead single, "Bad Habits", was released on 10 January 2016 alongside" → "The album's lead single, "Bad Habits", was released on 10 January 2016, alongside" with this wikilink instead
 * Wikilink music video
 * The dive bar performance is not sourced
 * Remove the links on singles
 * "been described as "A" → "been described as "a"
 * Pipe cinemascope to CinemaScope and add info about the synopsis briefly per sourcing
 * "Although, "Everything You've Come to Expect" was first released on March 10," → "Although, "Everything You've Come to Expect" was first released on 10 March 2016,"
 * "a deserted Californian beach."" → "a deserted Californian beach"." per MOS:QUOTE

Tour

 * Merge with the below section and retitle to Tours and other performances
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Europe
 * "Mexico, and Japan." → "Mexico and Japan." per the refs being too many jumbled together, please move some to earlier in the sentence for the relevant countries
 * "opening performance, and the Last Shadow Puppets" → "opening performance and the Last Shadow Puppets"
 * "In March and April they announced" → "In March and April 2016, the band announced"
 * "During the tour they were" → "During the tour the Last Shadow Puppets were" but only Alexandra Savior is sourced
 * Wikilink as music festivals
 * Wikilink Coachella
 * Pipe Radio 1's Big Weekend to BBC Radio 1's Big Weekend
 * Pipe Rockwave to Rockwave Festival
 * "T in the Park, and Lollapalooza in Chicago." → "T in the Park and Lollapalooza in Chicago."
 * "On April, the band played a" → "In April 2016, the Last Shadow Puppets played a"
 * Pipe Glastonbury to Glastonbury Festival
 * "a cover of "Moonage Daydream" in memory of David Bowie." → "a cover of "Moonage Daydream" in memory of Bowie."
 * "On July, the band played two nights" → "In July the Last Shadow Puppets played two nights"
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on London, although Alexandra Palace is not sourced
 * Lowercase the Smiths per MOS:THEMUSIC and remove the full stop from inside the song title
 * Pipe Loren Humphrey to Guards (band)
 * "Tyler Parkford, and string section members" → "Tyler Parkford and string section members"

Other performances

 * Make this the last para of the above sub-section
 * "The band made a number of" → "The Last Shadow Puppets made a number of"
 * "in promotion of the album" → "in promotion of Everything You've Come to Expect"
 * "In March, they played" → "In March 2016, they played"
 * Remove comma after Flux FM
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on London

Critical reception

 * Mention what the Aggregator AnyDecentMusic? gave the album in prose
 * "nature, and wrote that the album "improves over time."" → "nature and wrote that it "improves over time"." per MOS:QUOTE – please fix these issues throughout this section when they are not full sentences quoted
 * "said "The album is" → "said "the album is" and invoke the ref at the end per direct quoting
 * Put some of The Line of Best Fit review into your own words per WP:OVERQUOTE and also italicize the title Everything
 * The NME review is confusing; this starts a new quote at the "provoke" part inside a quote anyway, please put more into your own words and remove wikilink on NME
 * Only use Pallett's surname here
 * "full-time band," but overall" → "full-time band", but overall" plus re-invoke the ref at the first sentence for Telegraph
 * "thought the album was" → "thought Everything You've Come to Expect was" and re-invoke the ref on this sentence per direct quoting
 * "saying, "You can" → "saying that "you can" because this is not a full sentence
 * "as "nuanced," she ended up the review" → "as "nuanced"; she ended up the review"

Accolades

 * This can be written in prose and as a separate para rather than sub-section, as it's only one accolade

Commercial performance

 * Please add this section because you need to write out the chart performance in prose, adding sources too if there is any about things like sales

Track listing

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION for the first track listing
 * Pipe Rob Chapman to Rob Chapman (journalist)

Personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION for both the tables

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of these issues are fixed; good luck even though this is a bit sloppy! --K. Peake 21:03, 18 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I think I have fixed everything, or almost everything, could you revise that I did not miss anything, or am I just allowed one final review? IXCat (talk) 11:10, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Great work here and there are still some issues though, however of course you have a final review its not instant pass or fail like a job interview! What needs to be fixed please is change the part in Background to being about Kane's apartments in London, Paris and Los Angeles, re-invoke the ref after the sentence using a direct quote here, change "On "Miracle Aligner" the album its at" to using "is at" instead, removed the full stop from inside "Beatle-esque."", remove link on Arctic Monkeys in composition, author-link Zane Lowe, fix MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues of refs which are when they are using "" inside the title and the capitalization is unnecessary ones, also please remove or replace Forbes per WP:FORBES. --K. Peake 13:54, 23 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you! I've corrected those last notes you gave me, also tried to fix MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues, but I don't know if I've done it corectly or missed something IXCat (talk) 14:52, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I did some quick copy editing but no problems with this one really! --K. Peake 20:02, 24 June 2024 (UTC)