Talk:Exorista mella

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 August 2019 and 4 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Srivera2019.

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Behavioral Ecolgy
As part of my behavioral ecology course, I started this page as this fly did not have a page before. I added the following sections: description,Distribution, life cycle,longevity,parental care, preoviposition, oviposition,parasitism, host, host selection,experience, and mating. It is still missing a couple of things such as pictures.I got my information from reading academic articles found on google scholar which I cited. Srivera2019 (talk) 04:44, 1 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Suleima! Good start on your article. First, I added an image of the fly to the taxobox. Also, the information under “Description” doesn’t really fit a description section...it’s more for physical description. I would try to look at what was said in Walker 1849 (or any works that cited Walker) to see detailed physical descriptions you can include under Description so the discussion on sex determination/ratios can be moved somewhere more appropriate. Within that section, though, I reworded your sentences talking about an experiment that yielded null results so that the information to be learned from it was reported instead of more literally what was read in the source (this hopefully made the information more straightforward and similar to what would typically be found on Wikipedia). In general, combing through your sources and trying to replace general statements with specific info would really help. For example, sometimes the wording would be “due to the nature of…” or “because of…” without mentioning the cause of something. The page would be more clear if wordiness was cut out and replaced with specifics from the references (or even seeking out more sources). I added a couple links to other wikipedia pages when I thought it may be helpful to future readers as well. I also added a couple short sections Larvae and Pupae under Life Cycle to distinguish between the different sections of the fly life cycle. In general, I would go back and try to reword sentences as simple statements rather than a rehash of experiments because in general references cited should be “consensus” findings as in you can confidently state it (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Good_article_criteria). Good luck on the article! Chickfilkay (talk) 02:52, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Suleima. I am impressed with your research as it is not so easy to gather for this species. I have made some writing edits and expanded the “Description” section and the “Mating” section. I also went back to a source you cited and made a correction of a possible misinterpretation about the correlation between host size and parasite fly size and sex ratio. It is a bit confusing whether it is the host size or the fly size that is involved in what correlation. I also added internal links and citations wherever applicable. I hope my edits made the language clearer and the flow of the essay better. Alicelixuan (talk) 04:05, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Suleima, nice job so far on your article. The main changes I made were small word choices and readjusting sentence structure. I made sure verb tense was consistent and added commas where necessary. Small typos in punctuation and grammar were fixed. I also added the species of fly in several sections in order to specify the statements. In addition, I fixed the spelling of the fly's host Grammia geneura and added the internal link for the Grammia genus. I also added the internal link for polyphagous. One thing I would recommend reviewing is the sentence about larvae emerging from their hosts. Does that refer to the developmental stages of the host or of the fly? Overall though, I think your research was very thorough and your article was well-written. ArndtH (talk) 05:43, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Hi Suleima! Nice start with this article. Your entry has a good amount of information on this fly species, so I went through the article for grammar and organization. I fixed several verb tenses so that the tense remained consistent throughout paragraphs, as well as edited several sentences for wordiness. I also internally linked a few more words to existing Wikipedia pages. RappaiT (talk) 05:27, 4 December 2019 (UTC)

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